the old saddle

i was oiling my saddle and the idea got planted in my mind.

As I oil the saddle and I inspect it thoroughly

I notice how some stitches are torn out

And part of the leather has a 3 inch rip in it,

Nothing major that will affect the structural stability of it

But enough of some problems that it calls for concern.

 

The leather is hard and tough and stuck curling up on itself

And even with the oil to soften it to help it relax and uncurl

Its not working and it just continues to be stuck and stubborn

Its warn and it has mismatched straps

almost nothing is completely a set

Or an original part of the set up.

 

The saddle is warn and old

And there is no telling how many more years it can endure

But it will last a bit longer and I guess it must because it’s mine

And looking at it so thoroughly

I realize we have a lot in common.

Author's Note

please give me some feed back.... it was something i just whiped up quick after the idea was stuck in my mind for the last day and wouldnt go away.... so i'm not satisfied with it but need a bit of help.

Reviews

[Nicole Clarice Anna Wie..]

Actually .. i dont have much to say about this one. i liked it a lot. The flow worked for me, the diction was superb. But if you really want me to be "nit-picky", i'm not sure if i like the re-use of the word thoroughly ("As I oil the saddle and I inspect it thoroughly" and "And looking at it so thoroughly"). I say change one of these. Pull out the good thesaurus. lol
Overall good piece.

[Nicole Clarice Anna Wie..]

Also ... i just noticed one more thing - starting lines with the word "and" is not necessary in this piece. Try removing the "and"'s that start the lines and read it that way. Just a suggestion :)