ENCHANTING YOUTH

my first attempt at a Faibun poem. I did the same write in blank verse but did not do last stanza in that.lolol I will share at later date hahaha. I hope the feel comes through the form

Leaving the restaurant, needs time alone. He spots a tree just outside the garden.

Too many people around, tired, frustrated, sitting to think.Damn!!!!

Someone is coming out from the building, hopes whoever it is does not notice him.

 

Pained cranium swells

concrete jungles unknown steps

angers selfish mind

 

Really does not want to be bothered, not now. She walks slowly, shoulders bent,

fatigue shows.

Wanting to leave. Held in place, he watches. What keeps him anchored.

Draws his attention.

 

Time worn silhouette

curiosity saunters

Mounts with each aged stride.

 

soft music wafts gently in air. He a college student and she's old, life spent.

In gardens center she sways. The spell has been cast, mesmerized.

She glides, graceful and dreamlike. Who is she waltzing? Dance of fantacy or memory?

 

Ages wonderment

Hypnotic vision behold

Questions unanswered

 

Movement catches eye, turning sees young man in uniform, who smiles and nods.

Heading for garden in long sure strides. the dance of lover lost commences.

 

Loves apparition

Picturesque enlightenment

shocking disbelief

 

What he thought was worn and ugly, is changed. In awe frozen, a beauty to behold,

enchanting youthful wonder.

 

Miracle of sight

Transpired past echoes

Perfection shining

 

the spell is broken when final note plays. She falls to the ground,

Lifeless she lays. He frantically runs to her side. Holding her hand,

She smiles, serenity on her face.

 

Illusion shattered

Misgiving fearful ending

Calmness caresses

 

"Look beyond outer core to find beauty within" She say's

"Life beholds many wondrous things."

Slipping into her lovers final embrace she leaves him. With wisdom shared.

 

final enchantment

Dieing words forever linger

answers precious kept.

 

DOC DYR

 

Author's Note

HOPE YOU ENJOY WAS FIRST TRY

Reviews

[blind poet]

I am checking out what you have posted here, sis..you know how much I love this one..and I so admire your braveness...am not sure I would even attempt this form...lol *hugz* Dory

[Noel]

That was very deep, I just can't find any words for it! It was magnificent, and mysterious, and beautiful. I loved it! This is definatly one of my favorites. Great job!

[Helena]

Excellent Doc! Sorry its taken so long to read this, but wow,
am I glad I finally caught up with this wonderful write! Very well penned,
enchanting story line....good job!

Helena :)

[imm's place]

An excellent piece and a truely indication of how perfection has engulfed your writing with this masterpiece, mary