When I woke

When I woke

A Poem by D. Mansfield

I knew it was permanent,
when I woke.
we had seen our last
of each other.

How desperately,
I have missed you.
I long for
Friend and brother.

© 2023 D. Mansfield


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Such heartfelt wishes for the one lost. We break worldly ties but we cannot break the spiritual bonds, hard as we may try. A poem that's small yet so big on the message.

Posted 11 Months Ago


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D. Mansfield

9 Months Ago

Thank you Divya, I hope your well
so was the first line a dream , awoke to what you see, love or hate, you decide to compromise that love between them and I. excellent write.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

D. Mansfield

11 Months Ago

Thank you for reading, I'm not sure where some of my writing comes from, I think even tho I end with.. read more
Mauricio Montoya

11 Months Ago

anyway it got my atention
I love the idea that you put in the first lines of waking up and realizing that something is permanent, final, so sad, and the yearning that remains. Such a short poem, and such powerful feelings.

Posted 11 Months Ago


D. Mansfield

11 Months Ago

Norma, I thank you for those so kind words and thank you for taking the time to read it.
Last lines are intensely emotional. Good writing.

Posted 11 Months Ago


D. Mansfield

11 Months Ago

ATP, thank you so much for reading this, and the kind words, I look forward to reading you

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