logic

 

Logic

Why do we like materials?

It only hurts the ones we love

If we were to get a machine

And break it down

Bolt by bolt then fix it

Would it work?

If I were to get a loved one

 And rip them limb by limb

Then sow her together

Will she feel a kiss?

Would she still talk?

Would she still feel the love?

Then why do we concentrate on material

To show when

While doing that you may be blinded

By greed and

You don’t pay the price you loved one dose

Are we all climbing the same ladder?

To fit in If we are I want out because

A famous author once said

”why fit in when you were born to stand out”

-Dr. Seuss

 

 

 

Author's Note

plz check spelling thank you

Reviews

[falling_toxic_rain]

I really like the topic, it's something many people don't come to realize.
The flow is good. Nice write.
-rain

[soulesswriter]

Thanks i just realized you almost commented on almost all of what I posted thank you .if u read curse and didn't like it I don't blame u I need to fix and Maby find a way to rewrite it.My friend asked me to write a story of a man, sorrow, and ,death so I wrote curse .

[falling_toxic_rain]

Actaully I didn't come by to reading it, I read what's on the side(suggested reding) it was there, so I guess I'll have to read it.
I have the basic understanding of criticism, and I'll try to give you valuable feedback on it if you like,however I may not be the correct person to do that.
you're welcome, I like your stuff so it's no problem.

[soulesswriter]

Thank you I really appreciate I read your writing and I got to say it is pretty impressive

[falling_toxic_rain]

no problem. :) and thank you. :)