Baby I'm Addicted..

I'm a big fan of Enrique Iglesias.. i've written this poem on his voice.. and have tried my best to show my love towards his songs.. hope you all will like it.. :)

I can't find the reason, but ya, its true.. 
When I hear your voice, I'm more in love with you.. ! 
Every word of yours, just kiss away my sufferings.. 
My life gets the rhythm, and every day sings.. ! 
I feel like sitting before you, and get busy with your thoughts.. 
The love your words carry, play my heart's chords.. ! 
Whenever I feel low, That is all what I do.. 
Even my lips don't utter a word, as my ears love to listen you.. ! 
It's like a drug to me, a very sweet poison.. 
And please don't ask why, I said, I can't find the reason.. ! 
So let it be now, It's good to be little insane.. 
And continue to allure me, I'm waiting to be lost again.. ! <3

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

An apt ode indeed. Personally, I think there is little more beautiful than an "ode" poem, because it is showing such amazing admiration for someone or soemthing. I liked the emotions and much of the imagery was good...I would just caution you slightly to use imagery that is a little less ordinary-- "sweet poison", might be better as "hemlock" or "cyanide", something like that.

Technically, the form is a little frenzied...I would do something like this:

I can't find the reason, but it is true,
when I hear your voice, I'm more in love with you.

Your every word kisses away my suffering,
my life gets the rhythm, and every day sings.

I feel like sitting before you -- I get busy with your thoughts,
the love your words carry, play the chords of my heart.

--okay, just an example. What you have written falls naturally into a "couplet" format, so that would be two lines with commas and a period at the end to stop the thought, then another couplet. Be careful with things like exclamation marks and (..) because they break up the flow.

Overall, though, I think this was a fun read, and I truly enjoyed it. :)

[Divya Punjabi]

thank you so much.. :)