Not forgiven

I feel so bad,
So sad,feel like going mad,
The sunlight no longer smiles,
Looking at me, it fades away, and runs miles..
 
The moon no longer,with me,flirts,
Looking at me, it just goes nuts..
Stars no longer look at me and shine,
They just keep on giving me ugly whines..
They glare at me,command me to go away,
And never come in their way..
 
The flowers no longer dance,
They just wait for a chance,
To gossip behind my back,
And to tear me piece by piece they plan..
 
The rivers and streams are no less,
With their gurgling sounds they try to give me stress..
The mountains,trees and clouds laugh and watch my fall,
And make my mistakes recall..
 
I wonder about my mistakes now,
Want to sort them out somehow..
I regret my mistakes,
Want to follow the path of redemption,
But no one is ready to give me forgiveness,
To give me mercy..what to do?where to go?
Neither the nature nor the society..
 
Torturing me in the slightest way possible,
Snatching away the right to live my life,
I sit like a helpless creature now...
While they enjoy watching me die..alive..

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Rim]

" the flowers no longer dance " Brilliant, except the way successive couplets rhyme kinda ruined it for me , It's probably just because we have different styles that I find it strange : " .. dance " ; " ... chance "

[A. Amos]

The rivers and streams are no less,
With their gurgling sounds they try to give me stress..
The mountains,trees and clouds laugh and watch my fall,


Great lines above and whole read was good

[Divya]

thank you for the feedback

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome