Autumn's Breath

By eaves, burdened by the weight of pendulous leaves

Dropped by spent trees

The pulse of sap

Stilled within them.

 

By branches curtseying and bending tunefully

In anticipation of the dance they are called to

By gossiping winds

unable to hold their chatter.

 

By sleeping dog, untroubled by arthritic knees

As she chases industrious squirrels

Whispering death to them in stifled barks

Pleasure outpouring the soft container of her dreams.

 

Autumn, her breath tinged with the gold of promised darkness,

Exhales gently across the waiting land

And dusk seeps

Through closed lids

To meet her lover

As night descends.

Reviews

[Aidz]

Sweet breath of the seasons envelope the world

[InkSlinger]

Oh the beauty in this.. and the sad unyielding truths of what will be.. SO many GREAT lines in here.. so many that could be expanded.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

All I can say is that your writing is beyond the stances of poetry.

"Autumn, her breath tinged with the gold of promised darkness,
Exhales gently across the waiting land
And dusk seeps
Through closed lids
To meet her lover
As night descends."

Incredible and beautiful in its own form.

stunning wonderful write, like the imagery.

[Ed Hart]

there are lines here that came from some very high notes indeed

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Wow!
Amazing, poetic descriptions of nature in fall.

[Ladysue]

just gorgeous..love that last verse...beautifully done..

[KAREN]

Beautiful with wonder imagery that makes the read slip right into the poem!

[Robin]

Simply beautiful Audrey

[emmajoy]

BEAUTIFUL! You've captured Autumn's scents and scenes and somehow made it Nature's magic secret. Some of your word combinations are marvellous, original,
' .. branches curtseying ..', ' .. gossiping winds ..' etc. As for final stanza, it is wonderful!