The Kite

For my sister who wanted a poem a little Edward Gorey like about a kite--still feeling a bit rough

Summer pushed into Autumn

And Autumn pushed back

With biting breezes,

Lofting kites into steely skies

Across fields of grass and wildflowers

Poised to languish in the dampness soon to follow.

The boy ambles among crackling grasses

Kite in hand.

The wind sharpens its serrated blades

Upon downdrafts as it ruffles dark hair,

Pushing excitement to prime as adrenaline pumps.

Standing back, he lets go

The kite soars eagerly as wind pushes it upward in glee.

Exhilarated by kite’s sudden lift, the boy releases too much string.

Kite roams,

Pockets of dance left to the wildness of desire.

Nearby tree, branches distended by ravenous hunger

Snatches kite and eats it

For breakfast.

Reviews

[cartera]

Starts descriptive and does it very well. Finishes metaphorical with a great image.
Well done.
ATB
Alex.

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. an extremely vivid piece of writing with several shades ... the last four lines ... in particular ... have a quaint flavour ... exceptional poetry ...

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

darn tree! Happens all the time. Love it Audrey!

[Robin]

ah ~ innocence and trees

so many kite memories flooding my memoryscape ...

[Ladysue]

this was awesomely done...loved it right from the start. great flow and ending too...

[FJ Davis]

Starkly surprising and darkly amusing ending--to a wonderful autumn adventure of a poem.
No doubt in my mind, Audrey; you are one of the best poets on this, or any, website.

[Seshat Nidaba]

oh I love Autumn poems, let the games begin!

[raindroplove]

awwww you wrote this for your sister if i was to ask my brothers to do that theyed looked at me i was crazy then tell me to shut up and go away ( cant you feel our love) that was sweet of you

[Judy Ponceby]

Fantastic!! :) I love how you give the kite and the tree life of their own. Awesome opening lines. :) Love this one.