A Tear

A poem about loving

A single tear spills over into rivulet
   traced by the fearful hand
      of life's less gentle spirits.

A pearlescent stream
   festooning its prismatic hue
     upon cheek downy with love's light.

Do not weep for the weeper
   For the tear though borne of sorrow this day
      has the deepest blue of love
         as its path on cheek and chin.

As this weeper's heart
   finds love's blue light
      mirrored in the silvered heart
         of a
         tear.

Reviews

[Rene Velez]

wow that was heartfelt and beautiful, nice play on words.

[Robin]

love's blue light - such an emotive image within the last stanza of this heartsong

[FJ Davis]

Has beautiful well-in-hand; approaches gorgeous.
Superior work, Audrey.

[OT]

ah - "finds love's blue light mirrored in the silvered heart of a tear" - what a way to end a poem - nice - your words are soft and silk-like here!

[Larry Dyson]

Loving the flow the rolling of the tongue against lips as I is read outloud...

[WindSong]

A very soft and flowing poem with beautiful words that embellish the essence of your heart and soul. It is lovely, lovely lovely!

[sarah]

This is incredibly wonderful great work!

[Aidz]

some beautifully painted stanzas... I enjoyed it :)

[KAREN]

Nice emotions and great flow.
Love the first and last stanzas.

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I was not exactly drawn in during the inception, but soon after you began to develop on the cliche idea of a tear and mold it into something more original. Perhaps I would have liked it better if you would have dived into it straight from the get go, but still, I was pleased with the ending.
My only other criticism is in this line: "Do not weep for the weeper"
The word 'weep(er)' is said one or two more times in the piece, so I felt this line was an extra dose of the repetitive word. It sets me a little on edge, but other than that the work was fairly composed and well written.