The Luminosity of Death

A poem about death

Blue tendrils of spirit

Wrap gently around the yellow heat of the heart,

Cradling it, convincing it to surrender.

Purple knowingness clouds over fear,

Blanketing and warming the eye of the soul.

The pearlescent pink of purest love

Ceases not its silvered out-pouring into the soul of the beloved,

And buoyed upon opalescent tears, opaque and glistening,

Suffused, the heart shivers in tenderness,

As light shimmers and surrounds and moves through,

Replacing the old light of my eyes.

 

Sorrowful eyes to lose both the beloved

And the numinous eye of god.

Author's Note

Can you let me know if the ending works

Reviews

[Ladysue]

this reads so softly with such a calmness about it...I thought this was superbly written...

[emmajoy]

Yes, oh yes, it does .. especially having the space before the final two lines.. it's like a pause of light shining through a prayer. Your words have the inevitable awareness of and sensitivity to everything around this moment, mind alert - nothing to be missed, eyes moving here to there then back again.

[LA Lorena]

It more than works, it shines! My only question would be if you should capitalize the G in God in the last line. Truly divine work.

Nice mixing of color and feeling. The ending seems to work for me.

[Hayley]

Ooh yellow heat of the heart. Great phrase.
I like the colors in this, it really works for me. The imagery here is fantastic and it makes the poem flow in the most beautiful way.
And yes, the ending definitely works!

[Celeste21]

You turn something frightening into something serene and mystical. Eye-catching but still a bit eerie.

[Joel M Frye]

To lose both the light of life and the light of Spirit in the beloved's eyes in consecutive moments...oh, the ending most certainly works, Audrey.

[FJ Davis]

Everything works, Audrey. So magnificently alluring is your portrait of death, that I'm considering offing myself, right now. But then, there is that unfinished Bucket List. Oh, I don't know!--I am conflicted.
Not confused about your poem, though--stunningly good!

[Veronica Chandler]

I like it very much; and the ending works beautifuly just the way it is. The tenderness and hope is evident and oh so lovely! I really enjoyed this one Audry! Something awsome moves through these words of yours, and they touch my heart; I look forward to more of your creations.