The Liquidity of Verse

just another meandering

fine mist of words

colored by grammatical powdering

settle upon line and space

neither powder nor liquid

a sense of wonderment

aligns its arc with the verve of enlightenment

on the eve of nature’s unseen adventure

pilgrim

lost in the stars of eyes

I stand with the whispers

of promise at my back

and the shine of penciled mist

before me

copyright/all rights reserved Audrey Howitt 2012

Reviews

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

my favorite part:

"I stand with the whispers

of promise at my back

and the shine of penciled mist

before me"


i love the insightful detail you portrayed in this poem too!

[Audrey Howitt]

Thank you!!!

[Pax]

i like this lines:
a sense of wonderment
aligns its arc with the verve of enlightenment
on the eve of nature’s unseen adventure
~really great and beautiful words

[Audrey Howitt]

Thank you!

[Muse]

I loved how you threw in the word "pilgrim" to help define a voyager..a discoverer. Captivated I am by your beautiful penning.

Muse

[Audrey Howitt]

Thank you so much!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I stand with the whispers

of promise at my back

and the shine of penciled mist

before me...........beautiful Audrey!

[Allen Smuckler]

"meandering" and flowing....not to mention liquid, Audrey
I loved every line...well almost every line...still trying to figure out how "pilgrim" fits in...except perhaps to clarify, and distinguish "unseen adventure".
but sighs to: ..."lost in the stars of eyes...whispers of promise at my back and the shine of penciled mist before me."
very poetic and ethereal, Audrey
wonderful write
allen

[Audrey Howitt]

Thank you Allen--I meant "pilgrim" in its old fashioned context--a person in search of something and on a journey---maybe reverse the 2 lines--"pilgrim" and "lost in the stars of eyes"???

[Star Wolf]

The power of the written word, this is a truly awesome poem. I love the imagery in this. Your words bring on the power of emotion.

[Audrey Howitt]

Thank you so much Star Wolf! I am so pleased that you liked it!

[Robin]

poetry , like life , is to be felt , I feel this poem through my own poetic heart .

[Audrey Howitt]

Thank you Robin---hugs to you--I am headed out the door to teach out of town for a couple of weeks--so I will probably have to catch up with you later---

[Robin]

until then

[lee von cleef]

Pilgrim, I was rolling along great until "Pilgrim" and it's not your fault, It's just the world gives us all these kick starts, so when I see Pilgrim, I hear John Wayne,
"You better watch your step Pilgrim ,or your gonna be pushing up daisies"I've never had a" whisper of promise at my back",usually a swift boot in the "coma se yama"Casey,my father,was a doer not a talker,so thank you for " the shine of penciled mist"I see him flying through it in my mind. Maybe with a little focus tonight when my body locks down for some evolutionary reason I can not explain I will dream of him Flying over the clouds ,Flying ,a prostitute, no visible means of support,B-26 Marauder,bringing the shell of his plane home .Steering on engine power alone, tail-gunner dead,the mole navigating,Douglas Duster flying through the shine of your penciled mist so I can be here today.

Smile Cleef

[Audrey Howitt]

I wonder if others have the same reaction??? Not what I wanted or intended--

[lee von cleef]

I doubt it,but different words ring bells in peoples heads, its hard to read the heard everyday, and the target keeps moving.Me I am still stuck in the gate. Pretty sure they will run right back around to me. Of course no win picture for me just you.

[Lily Mae]

A journey of enlightenment from the tip of your penciled mist.. :) Enchanting and simply beautiful..xo

[Audrey Howitt]

Thanks Lily! Hope all is well in your world!

[MOON]

Beautifully penned the poets eye.

[Audrey Howitt]

Thank you Moon!