My First Time

I’d never done it before 😆

Eyeing her from the side with utter delight

I sat down beside her that cold autumn night

And rubbed her back gently, with its smooth amber tone

Her mouth watered slightly, she let out a moan

Ever so nervous, knowing not what to do

Still it was hard, I was quickly turning blue

If you know what you’re doing, she won’t kick they say

But even their words didn’t help me this day

Let’s get this started I said boldly still

There’s a simple longing that must be fulfilled

The rest was a blur but training kicked in

Getting between her legs, I just dove right in

There was stroking and tugging and then at last

Came forth that white liquid with an exciting blast

Exhausted and drained all I could say was wow!

This was my first time, milking a cow.

Author's Note

This is an assignment for a creative arts class. Please share your thoughts. I need them to give to the teacher as proof of seeking feedback.

Reviews

[Re-Pete]

you set quite a trap for where our minds like to tread. creatively misleading. mission accomplished. well done. always make sure to warm your hands first ... :)

[Sauti_Ukweli]

Thanks so much for your feedback!! That’s good information to keep in mind!

[Sami Khalil]

Romantic with little erotica that portray this relationship being smooth and then explosive in the act of sex, but the best part, it the reader finds out it was about milking a cow. Amazingly funny, witty.

[Sauti_Ukweli]

Thanks so much for your feedback! I appreciate your taking time to read it!

[Sami Khalil]

No problem. You are welcome.

[Babbette Francis]

Well at first I thought it was a date. Then you mentioned the kicking sounded like a date gone wrong then you dove right in....to milking a cow and I was like 🤣 lol that's funny. Very cute.
Great rhyme and rhythm.

[Sauti_Ukweli]

Thanks so much for your feedback. I was really glad my teacher assigned this to us. I am working in finding my writing voice and surprise endings are becoming my favorite. Thanks so much for the encouragement.