"A lonely lover in an unknown sea"

I wanted to think from a broken hearted man's prospectives(how do a man feel when he is ditched by his girl in a very bad note after spending so many years with her),which I couldn't much, yet I tried

She just walked away from my heart
Leaving me in the house of dark
I tried my best to hold her
Everything between us were getting sour
She said she deeply and madly loved me
Nevertheless, I see myself alone in the sea
Was that a good decision which I made?
When I closed my eyes and blindly believed my fate.
She was my one and only darling maid
For I did everything what ever she said
I'm sure, I was not a simple lover
I wanted to be with her forever

I still remember her simple smile
Could see that even when I'm away, a mile
Ears crave to listen to that charismatic laughter
And those enlightening eyes which were brighter
Than the shooting stars in the sky
For which every creature would die
Projected herself as if she's not gonna leave me
Her love was so loud, so it sounded like the buzz of a bee

I failed to stay in her heart for long
Now I'm left with Bruno Mars's song
"When I was your man," absolutely true
I Miss that seashore our name we had drew..
She was happy with me, I thought
But what kind of happiness she wanted, I never bought.
I gave her my family to love
She was just like an infant dove
How soon she forgot me
Leaving me behind, in the middle of an unknown sea.
Till today I waited and waited for her
Now even if she comes back to me I'll never take her..

Author's Note

When love leaves you, its does not consider your gender, whether you are a man or woman... It hits you with the same speed and pace.. Hope you like it. Please leave your comments.

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

What's interesting is...if I take all the lines with "she" and put them together...the verse compiles as a whole unit within itself:

She just walked away from my heart
She said she deeply and madly loved me
She was my one and only darling maid
For I did everything whatever she said
Projected herself as if she's not gonna leave me
She was happy with me, I thought
But what kind of happiness she wanted, I never bought.
She was just like an infant dove
How soon she forgot me
Now even if she comes back to me I'll never take her...

Yet...the entire narrative reads like a song...there are 32 lines in the entirety...and the way this comes out as I read your words...gives that perspective...just IMPO...of course...

[Day Dreamer]

Wow.. This is splendid....
Thanks a lot for reading and analysing it.. I'm just amazed..

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Awesome writing, Congratulations

I think you are saying something very deep, something is hidden, and sewn deep within you. You are not sure whether to emote with that which you are feeling.

[Day Dreamer]

Thanks sqinklaPsyOps... I really appreciate your time for reading and leaving a comment...

[Chaos_Collector]

Another beautiful poem Day Dreamer :) My favorite part was here "I still remember her simple smile
Could see that even when I'm away, a mile
Ears crave to listen to that charismatic laughter
And those enlightening eyes which were brighter"
This definitely speaks out to many people and I love it for that. You're becoming one of my favorite writers :)

[Day Dreamer]

Hahaha ohhhh dear Chaos collector I'm humbled.. Your words are like pearls to me(simple girl).. Thanks..

[Chaos_Collector]

And you're like pearls to me as well now Day Dreamer.. You're welcome.. :)

[MoriartyMesa]

Projected herself as if she's not gonna leave me
Her love was so loud, so it sounded like the buzz of a bee




Wondering why that stood out.

[Day Dreamer]

Perhaps the fate... Sounds funny though...lol