Water washes slowly over the dying man

Is now any different than always

or forever?

 

Isn’t worry basically saying

you’re concerned about everything?

As if the world owed you some

consent

or concession for walking upright

and talking forthrightly.

 

Sometimes you can be bathed

in the blue light of sadness

and survive

 

forget about what they tell

you about being happy, joyous and free

 

and if you have to light a fire

to think of God, then Amen

 

and tra-la-la.

Reviews

[Hedra Helix]

like a box of heavy things { As if the world owed you some
consent
or concession for walking upright
and talking forthrightly.}
and feathers. { and tra-la-la. }
great mix that highlights and reveals the reverberations of both.
Someone else mentioned personality.
It gives off the feel of atmosphere, the pitch of voice, in a very small span of words and sound.

diiiiig it.

I read your other also, your voice is distinct. ;)

[StrawberryDream]

Artsy. I liked the personality behind the words. :3

[Bella22]

First of all - welcome! I really liked your poem! As Frank said, the ending was very clever! Nice job. Keep writing!

[Frank F. Atanacio]

well done-- and the ending was well clever..: