Youth

The scary transition from youth to adulthood

Can you recall the first time you pretended to fall asleep?

The adrenalin rush that surged through your credulous heart

As children we encounter exhilaration within the most basic adventures

And what penetrates us were only scratches or black and blues

Never did we consider a broken heart feasible

Nor sadness an ordinary commonplace

Oh how innocent leaves whither away from the grown tree so agile

That bright warm light now a fragile flitter with a florescent glow

An unpleasing adult path anticipates our thriving steps

Into a forest of darkness and death

“Come children with your youthful minds”

They call

“Let me show you what lies ahead… let your curiosity command you.”

Reviews

[Stefanie Holmes]

This was very well done Lauren. Creative and capturing. Loved it!

~Stefanie

[Meraki]

Oh that ending " “Come children with your youthful minds” They call “Let me show you what lies ahead… let your curiosity command you.” " ominous isn't the word for it, it's my favorite part too. I think you've captured that transition into adulthood artistically. Wonderful!

[Ren Grace]

Thank you so much for leaving that beautiful comment :) you're too nice! Thank you

[Meraki]

You're welcome :)

[Elina]

This is very well written. I enjoyed it quite a lot.

[Ren Grace]

Thank you!

[Robert Strzalko]

Yes, it can be difficult leaving childhood behind. It's important to remember though that there is a lot of good things on the horizon.

[Ren Grace]

Thank you so much

[Ai Lun]

It's very nicely worded and has a good rhythm to it :) Well done!

[Ren Grace]

Thank you so much!!

[Devesh]

The sentiment behind the poem is something we can all relate to very well

"Oh how innocent leaves whither away from the grown tree so agile
That bright warm light now a fragile flitter with a florescent glow"

I love these lines! The image they create is very powerful, something that sticks with you. Beautiful, beatiful!

[Ren Grace]

Thank you for the appreciation :) It means a lot

[Devesh]

You're welcome. Keep writing!. =)

[Devesh]

If you have the time, I also had a question. I just joined yesterday, and I can't fathom what 'Feature' is about. Would be glad if you could explain what it's for because searching did not help. Sorry for disturbing!

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

You couldn't put into better words. I remember "the coming of age" period, and I got to say it is a little frightening, but we all go through it. Nice job.

[Ren Grace]

Thank you!

[A. Amos]

Another cool piece Nicely crafted and enjoyed the read

[Ren Grace]

Thank you!

[Erik Daniel]

Love it! You get better with each poem you write! Great job!

[Ren Grace]

Thank you as do you!

[Erik Daniel]

Thanks so much!