Mysterious Dream

The doors were closed.
The lights were shut off.
The room was dusty and unkempt.
I couldn't see the nearby walls.
The floor were cracked
as I stepped into the room.
I felt the weakness of the floor and I thought I could fall'
if I moved too quickly.

A hand moved toward me and I was scared.
I felt the touch of the hand as soon as I entered the room.
I heard a voice saying Ssh, don't worry and I will help you.
What-ever you need. I can help.

I felt safer.
I could feel the sun kissing my face.
I wanted to know who the person could be?
But I knew it couldn't be possible.
I realized it was just a dream.

Author's Note

E.C - Coyote
Thanks mate :)

Reviews

[Saddam]

Lovely write dear friend..
it is great.

[Dimple Nahata Jain]

thank you :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Dreams are always intriguing.And i believe in th power of visions.So this speak spoke to me.If you are a beginner then i must say you are improving.This the first piece i have read of yours.This Cafe has helped me improve a lot.Hope it does the same for you too. *keep writing* way to go girlie.Just a suggestion see that seventh line in first stanza could be broken into two.So that it doesn't seem so lengthy.*takecare* :)

~Sophy

[Dimple Nahata Jain]

Thank you :)
I will keep things in mind so that it helps me further :)

[Mai L Nissen]

I like your description in the first stanza, setting the scene and the mood for the rest of the poem, you did that really well! For me this is the best of what I have read from you so far :)

[Dimple Nahata Jain]

awww... thank you so much :)

[CA Anurag Sharma]

noone but only you can help yourself.... good poem anyway... nice write up....

[Dimple Nahata Jain]

thank you :)

[Emily]

This is my favorite one of yours!!
Keep it up!

[Dimple Nahata Jain]

thank you :)

[~]

An intriguing narrative. I really liked "I felt the weakness of the floor". A perfect personification!

[Dimple Nahata Jain]

thank you :)