Short Story : A brush and a wish

Short Story : A brush and a wish

A Story by Dimitri

Today  I woke up and my left hand was gone. I wasn't surprised at all, I was expecting it to disappear for a few weeks already so it came as no surprise to me.

The next morning my left arm was gone. Then and there I got mad, and then, scared. I ran to my bathroom just to let the mirror tell me that it was really gone. And so it did, and so I cried. I didn't want my hand, that much was true, but my whole arm? Something was definitely wrong.

I went to my closet and opened it. Long lines of lifeless t-shirts were waiting for me. I choose the ugliest one and it made me feel good. After dancing and tripping for a while I managed to put my t-shirt with a yellow smiley face on it and went downstairs to fetch myself a cup of coffee.  I imagined making myself a coffee arm and going everywhere with it. I would drink it whenever I was thirsty and then in the evenings I would fill it back with Ethiopian Coffee, or maybe a Mexican blend. That would definitely make me have some status with my friends, and I'm sure a ton of girls would love to hang out with me just because of my coffee arm. That thought made me depressed.

I opened the window and sat staring at the infinite nothingness. Buses, cars, clothes, ambition and solitude. I thought I had seen through all of that and that's when I asked for my left hand to disappear. Why? It wasn't clear any more. I remembered my grand father telling me that what was good in the morning was usually wrong or rotten in the evening. I didn't know much about wisdom or words, but I definitely felt that something was rotten right now. I went to sleep fearful of what may happen to the rest of my body.

Heavy eye lids. An acid taste in my mouth told me I hadn't had a good night sleep. I kept my eyes closed and tried to feel every part of my body with my mind. It didn't work.  I tried to move my left arm but it was still gone.  Hot sweat sprinkled from my forehead.  Was I not being brave? I knew I wished it, but I had stopped at my left hand, and now my arm was gone but I was still scared. I knew that I couldn't go on like this, chopping every bit of my body until it was all gone. It was all or nothing, but then, I had already started with my left hand and I didn't feel good.

I jumped out of the bed and picked up a cigarette on my way to the window. I slowly smoked three with an empty head. Then I opened the drawer and saw it there, still on the exact same spot where I had left it. I looked at the glass recipient sitting next to it and it was all dried blood. I took both items to my kitchen and warmed them up. I went back upstairs and with a frown and more determination that I thought was capable of started to paint a big red line over the "to live or not to live" letters that were written on my roof. The brush had a warm feeling to my hand so I decided to go on.

When I stepped down I knew that my arm would be back tomorrow and that even though I lacked the character, I know knew how I wanted to live.


© 2010 Dimitri


Author's Note

Dimitri
metaphors metaphors and more metaphors, did I over did it?
feel free to make any criticism

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Honestamente...la verdad.. sin detalles.. Si lo vuelves a escribir.. te resultara mejor. Tienes bastantes errores y repites las palabras demasiadas veces.. tomate tu tiempo.. leelo.. y busca la manera de escribir el misterio del que tu quieres que leamos.. tienes la idea.. ahora busca la puerta y dejalo salir.. es bueno.. me gusto.. tu amiga

Posted 14 Years Ago


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I enjoyed it. It is has a eerie metaphors that I think only the author can completely understand. I picked up on several of them but probably missed some too.
I'm going to go back and reread it after I'm done with this. Very interesting story.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Honestamente...la verdad.. sin detalles.. Si lo vuelves a escribir.. te resultara mejor. Tienes bastantes errores y repites las palabras demasiadas veces.. tomate tu tiempo.. leelo.. y busca la manera de escribir el misterio del que tu quieres que leamos.. tienes la idea.. ahora busca la puerta y dejalo salir.. es bueno.. me gusto.. tu amiga

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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