My Girl

Random thoughts are the best because they have no order, no structure, simply entropy.

When I'm sad and lonely, I think of you waiting for me on that cold park bench.
The way your eyes lit up when they met with mine for the very first time.
We were two lost souls flickering in and out of love.
But when we met that fateful day, something changed.
I reached out to grab your hand, and you came in so close to me.
You hugged me so tight and laid your head upon my chest.
We stood out in the cold while it snowed in that empty park for our first date.
I'll never forget how you made me feel.
Not very many words were spoken, we simply embraced one another as if we already knew.
We both had this preconceived idea of what love meant.
That is until we met each other and found exactly what we were looking for.
I felt so numb and tingly around you, as if you were the painkiller my heart was searching for.
It's so very hard to explain, but I'll try my best.
That day we both knew the feelings were real, and that my heart was yours to steal.
As you walked away out of that cold, empty park; only one thing was on my mind...
Did I dazzle you?...Did I wow you?

Author's Note

Enjoy.

Reviews

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Oh my gosh! Why are there not anymore views and reviews? This is simply amazing, Dillon. It reminds me sort of my relationship with my last boyfriend. It was sweet and one of those 'wow' moments. When I read this poem, it brought back those memories. It is not necessarily a bad thing either. I like poems like this though! It does not matter that it does not have a certain pattern or structure. Those are honestly my favorite. You are writing from what you have on your heart. Like I have told you in the past, you have a true talent in writing. Keep writing! I am hoping that you and your "girl" are still together and that everything is well. :)

[dillonjensen]

Your words humble me to the core. I'm always smiling when I can, with my words, take someone to a place they have once been where they were truly happy. I'm also very glad you enjoyed the lack of structure that I emphasized here. Structure and rhyme schemes sometimes kill the creativity within us. They restrict or bound us to certain rules. Thank you so much for reading/reviewing, and saying I have talent in writing. What a wonderful thing to say! I should also note that I am single and have been for quite some time. This just randomly popped into my head one day when I was thinking of how I'd imagine a romantic first date with someone. Who knows, maybe it'll even happen one day.

[MoriartyMesa]

Now this took me back, the words had a nice magic to them that made me want to jump up and sing https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=swSytFVMHuU

[dillonjensen]

Thank you for your kinds words! I'm glad this resonated with you!

[FlatLineBeauty]

Oh wow this was so sweet and amazing. Just that feeling of being in the persons arms that you love... Best feeling ever. Simply amazing. Xo Winter

[LouisianaBird]

This has a lot of good things in it, but was written in a very immature way. I love what you have to say, and most of it seems genuine. The only thing you're missing is finding genuine ways to say it. Find your own words, and your own rythm. Goodness, how beautiful you will write once you find those.

[dillonjensen]

Thank you for your honest review. I appreciate all the feedback.

[LouisianaBird]

I hope that this does everything but discourage you. I wouldn't have read through the whole thing, if it wasn't worth it. Keep that in mind!

[dillonjensen]

One of the hardest things to do is to suppress your defense mechanisms and allow criticism to be constructive. I am not in the slightest discouraged. I can only humbly thank you. Your words won't be forgotten!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Random indeed, quite sweet and flattering.

[dillonjensen]

Thank you for reading and reviewing! Appreciate the kind words.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Your welcome.