The Ice Within My Veins

Sometimes the fewest words carry the most meaning.

My heart grows cold and dreary,
forgetting the warmth a woman provides.

An icy-like wave of despair and loneliness;
entrapped by the walls that which I build.

Author's Note

Even my fondest memories begin to fade.

Reviews

[Pax]

Short yet enough said for us to relate to its sentiments.

“The Ice Within My Veins” I find it a very catchy title. Oh, the cold, it always does engulf us with a feeling of emptiness, the emotional distress of the walls we build for the battle within.

I believed you had just sprinkled the ice waves of loneliness here. To achieve and write such words, this must come from a broken hearted person. I find that the wall that you build around your heart prevents all the warmth of your friends, family and even new lover. It’s a painful battle. But I do believed when writing the emotions we felt, it brings some realization to mind, to keep tabs on which part we must take the change, to open the bolt doors. In time you’ll see.

A very nice work you have here. I really do enjoyed its profound depths.

[dillonjensen]

Truly humbled by your extensive review. I greatly appreciate your kind words for such a short piece. I thank you for trying to place yourself within the context of the poem itself, as I am certain we all have felt like this one time or another.

[Pax]

you are most welcome :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is concise and full of pain... I know of the wall you speak of...

My only hope for you is that it melts away, because you have such a big heart, Dillon...

Your expression moves me... Well penned!~xoxo~:)

[dillonjensen]

Thank you very kindly, Robbie. I hope to find someone that has a big heart like yourself. So sweet and sincere. I greatly appreciate your wise words. :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I know you will... you are a prize, my sweet!...
It's my pleasure to read this. ~xoxo~:)

[dillonjensen]

You are a delicate rose amongst the weeds. One could only imagine. :D

[Robbie~xoxo~]

awwww I am flattered by such sweet words.. there you go again. ;)

[dillonjensen]

I try my best to put a smile on not only myself, but those around me as well. :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

I know that feeling exactly, without the warmth of another soul the icy fingers of despair do have a way of gripping our hearts. Powerfully short.

[dillonjensen]

Thank you for reading/reviewing. I greatly appreciate your kind words.

[FlatLineBeauty]

So much emotion conveyed in something short and simple xo Winter

[dillonjensen]

I greatly appreciate you taking the time of day to read/review my poem.

[FlatLineBeauty]

Anytime, Dillon. If you ever want or need an opinion or a review just hit read request or send a message. :)

[dillonjensen]

Will do, thank you again!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed, the telling of old tales may lay heavy and never really leave us, well done, good read.

[dillonjensen]

Thank you for reading.