The Edge

Dreams play tricks on you. I took a derivative of a line from a Counting Crows song to spawn the first stanza.

You see the traffic rise

Then a sudden surprise

Closer the sidewalk spins

You wake and it’s gone...you win.

 

Passion burning in your head

Elusive girl of your dreams, in your bed

Sweet release, it’s what you choose

You wake and she’s gone...you lose.

 

Intruder breaches your door

Glass shatters, this is war!

Search the house, pursuing within

You wake and he’s gone...you win.

 

Kindergarten friends, there’s no rain

Innocent times, who knew about pain?

All over again, like you just got the news.

You wake and she’s gone...you lose.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Sometimes I dream that something happened and it takes me until noon, until it dawns on me that it didn't. Also, I have dreamed that a childhood friend (that passed away) was alive and halfway through the day....it hits me like a rock...that's all this is about...

Reviews

[Levioshock]

This was great!

[clemon73]

great job. I have also had dreams that it took me a few hours to figure out it was just a dream. Love the rhythm of this, it flows wonderfully.

[Samuel Dickens]

Maybe a psychologist could explain the phenomena, but I suspect there may be some deep-rooted desire for said dream to be true. I've had the experience, and it always involves something good--never anything bad. Nice writing, as always.

[Haifa]

Its true.. sometimes I keep thinking of what I did dream for long time and like I think I still in the dream because its still in my head. Well, its really good job that you wrote about this thing. Well done.

[A.Lee]

Aha! I got the meaning of the poem right before I even looked at your author's note. I know a lot of times a dream will be in my head like reality until later I'm like... wait.... Nice job. You captured that element well.

[Jacqueline Lopez]

This poem flows beautifully and I like how you had different elements to create it.

[deeps]

Wow! Quite the write
Wonderful rhyme and flow
I enjoyed this so you know.

[Another Relic]

Cool poem. I like the way you made the contrasts and the ending. Nice.

[Subjective Sanity]

Makes my head spin...I LOVE IT!

[Millionth Muse]

I really enjoyed the back and forth of this piece. You contrasted the two opposing ideas in this one quite beautifully. Great rhythm and flow top this one off...even the rhyme was well done.