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My first free-form poem from a few years back. Three years since this asteroid grazed my surface:)

My heart screams for the lover I never had.

I know this delicate flower. 

She is my oldest friend.

This can never happen, at least for me.

Many nights, imploring me to come over and slide my arms around her,

She knows when I am thirsty for her nectar.

I deluded myself into thinking we could stay just friends.

Electricity flows through our conversations.

I can't do this now.

For the moment, I scramble to ground to our thinly veiled passion.

Although, I'd ride lightning to get to her right now if she called.

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Temptations. My first attempt at free-form poetry. I have never used the strike-through device before either.

Reviews

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I love freestyle which is good for me as it is all i write and know of lol
I like the words crossed out.. it gives us more to think about..
Can people of the opposite sex be just friends, or does this happen sooner or later?
Well written I like it very much.. and long time no see!

Chloe

[DBURKE]

I love this the man hyping himself up to it eh- lol! That is my interpretation- great poem!

[Elissa; the genuine art..]

"Although, I'd ride lightning to get to her right now if she called."
That's an amazing line. Absolutely lovely.
-Elissa :)

[Tate Morgan]

Women they have us right where they want us dont they
lol
tate

[kewlbluetiger]

Ah wow. Yeah this poem plays on my most favorite theme of duality. Usually don't go for tricks like the cross out thing, but here it's so well thought out it's fantastic. Love love love the intensity in lines 5,6,7. Rawr! Great poem!

[Subjective Sanity]

Powerful but, it gives me mixed emotions. Depending on yous situation it can be beautiful or deceptively devious. That's what good writing does. Well done!