NO FREAK

its time you believe yourself and who you are.Have time and care for him who loves you. Dont look down on himher because you never know what fate holds.

You are true,he is the luckiest man on earth

but for my side,i think i was a fool to let him go

i scolded him for nothing

accused him for what was just illusion

i slammed the door on his face

but never gave him a chance to explain himself up

i believed my girlfriends that no need to pester a man because they are all "FREAK"

but for him he always showed his humbleness,the humility that he holds

he never let it his anger betray him

for me i just backed back at him like a sprawless lioness but what i fool 

i never saw the love that he holds in his heart shining through his eyes and illustrated through his action

all those fall on my blind naked eyes

its only know that i see him with the chick who understands him thats when i see the reality and the love that he meant

i envy how the work out peacfully and regret what i left behind

for suer i still miss him,his touch,the strong and able hands

but all these have become a fantasy,building castles which will never shelter me

he is gone and i never replace his presence 

thats why as i sit down under this tree, where we first meet and where the moon said it all only that there is no moon but the sun that burns, i understand they are not all "FREAK"

SOME HAVE THEIR PRINCIPLES AND DIGNITIES

UNDERSTAND HE LOVES YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 

Reviews

[Schatzi]

Hello diana Apiyo,

This is a very interesting poem. It's so down-to-earth and full of a range of emotions.

Is there a reason why you are not adding a space after your commas? Is this a stylistic choice, such as with not using capitals until the very end of the poem or not using punctuation?

These are a few notes I took while reading. Feel free to use them or ignore them as I'm not certain of your stylistic choices, but these will make your poem more grammatically correct if you should choose to use any of my suggestions.

You are true[;] he is the luckiest man on earth

accused him [of] what was just illusion

but for him[,] he always showed his humbleness,the humility that he holds

for me[,] i just backed back at him like a spraw[ed] lioness but what i fool

all those fall[?] on my blind[,] naked eyes

[its? *did you perhaps mean I?] only know that i see him with the chick who understands him that[']s

I envy how the [workout] peac[e]fully and regret what i left behind

for [suer? *did you perhaps mean user?] i still miss him,his touch,the strong [Strong is an overused word. Consider robust or vigorous] and able hands

he is gone[,] and i never replace his presence

that[']s why as i sit down under this tree, where we first meet and where

Again, these are simply suggestions. Feel free to use them or ignore them.

Thank you for sharing your poem!

Kind regards,

Schatzi

[diana Apiyo]

hello Schatzi
I really appreciate your concern towards my work.I will take keen interest in them and hope to do better next time.

[Lydia Shutter]

Hindsight is 20/20. Sometimes we do not take the time to understand people. Once they are gone, we realize the mistakes we made. If you are fortunate, you will have a chance to reconcile. Never listen to others...listen to your heart. Lydi**

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