IMMORTALS KISS

I wrote this one a long time ago, and I lost it... today I found it..

Come hither within,
Your life’s lonely end,
A touch of  forevers youth.

Dreams of nights of sinfully
Plights and days of peacefully slumber.

Hold my hand as we explore this land.
forevers-promised gifts.

 

One touch from my lips to your sweet skin,

will accept my Immortal Kiss.

Author's Note

This is one of my first vampire poems, I lost it and couldn't find it for several years, and Today I found where I hide it.

Reviews

[BrightEyes]

hon, i'm so sorry. I dont know what happened. I'm reviewing this again, in the hopes it will let me rate again. I slid the bar over - it said 100 and I hit rate. After it loaded, it said 89%. I'm going to try to rate again to fix it. I'm so so so sorry!

ok - here's what I did - I deleted the review with the other rating - which I hope deletes the rating. Anyway - liked this one! loved the phrase "forevers promised gifts". and how that led into the ending of "immortal kiss". ok - trying this again.

*hugs*

laura

[Marie]

Excellent. The picture is perfect too.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Mmm, wonderful poem. I love it and the picture is cool. Awesome write!!!

Heather

[George Love]

Great work! Wonderful imagery of the immortal kiss!

[Daryl]

I love rediscovering old pieces of writing. It's like finding treasure at the bottom of an old storage trunk.

Nice one!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Loved this! Wonderfully written. Nicely done.


Great Write.