IMMORTALS KISS

I wrote this one a long time ago, and I lost it... today I found it..

Come hither within,
Your life’s lonely end,
A touch of  forevers youth.

Dreams of nights of sinfully
Plights and days of peacefully slumber.

Hold my hand as we explore this land.
forevers-promised gifts.

 

One touch from my lips to your sweet skin,

will accept my Immortal Kiss.

Author's Note

This is one of my first vampire poems, I lost it and couldn't find it for several years, and Today I found where I hide it.

Reviews

[BrightEyes]

hon, i'm so sorry. I dont know what happened. I'm reviewing this again, in the hopes it will let me rate again. I slid the bar over - it said 100 and I hit rate. After it loaded, it said 89%. I'm going to try to rate again to fix it. I'm so so so sorry!

ok - here's what I did - I deleted the review with the other rating - which I hope deletes the rating. Anyway - liked this one! loved the phrase "forevers promised gifts". and how that led into the ending of "immortal kiss". ok - trying this again.

*hugs*

laura

[zee]

It's sweet. I like the image it creates in my brain. Made me think of romance and lust, of forever love. I did not realize it was a vampire poem until I read your authors note. I took the immortal title as an indication of love being eternal shown in a simple kiss. And that their love will stand the test of time. Thanks for sharing. I love how I interpreted completely different.

[Wildecat]

I like Vampires and I like this poem, well done.

[Anthony D. Howe]

I like the flow and feel of this poem. Seems like something that would be scrawled on a wall right before you were bitten. Very short and sweet, so little to portay such dark promises.

[chris' girlfriend]

wow how romantic :P
vampires are awesome!!!

[Kelley Pascoe]

very powerful writing here Diana ! I enjoyed reading each and every word!!!
Thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost

[Red Raven]

It's scary to find so many lusty pleasure in one's lip.
Its like almost scared to touch the 'forever' happiness.
I like it.
Thanks for sharing.

[Trisha]

to me immortal is something that is forever in bloom. Some part of us all is immortal and we are all in debt of its kiss. I found a deep meaning in your words and find your poem insightful and passionate.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

What a tasty little morsel this is... I would love to take a bit out of it.

[Kelly D. Burris]

Flows very nicely. Leaves the imagination to keep going after it's read..... lingering.
Nicely written and the picture you chose was good with it.
Kelly

[Vanessa]

I really liked that one. And it reminds me of a book on vampires that I've read.
Nicely done. But I wish it was longer.

-Vanessa Alyse