Seven Deadly Sins

Look in to these souless eyes.

Can you tell if it’s truth or lies

I draw you in with promises of  lust

Just one kiss and you will trust

My darkness will penetrate your soul

Each step that you make will be under my control

It won’t be to long before you find

That you are slowly losing your mind

The pain that consumes you is becoming clear

But it isn’t the agony that you fear

It’s the realization that you’ve lost

And it’s more than your being that it cost

I own you more than you know

As your body is dying slow

Your heart will be the last to go

It will wither before it dies

And my laughter drowns out your cries

Because you made your final mistake

You let the evil in to claim it’s stakes

Now you will lose before you win

For you have commented the seven deadly sins

 

 

Reviews

[THERISA]

Your rhyming couplets really flows in the way, which you describes a poor soul's decent into Hell. Appealling to the basic nature of a person's lust. Creating a dark and "abandon all hope, for those, who enter here" atmosphere to the poem. Thank you for sharing this poem.

[Vampstyle]

wow. this is really great. I love the conclusion.

[V. K. Harris]

You are a naughty wicked writer, I love it. Excellent write.

[DonGilbert]

this sounds yummy

[Tania Leigh]

Ooooh, I like, I like :-)

Very chilling, and that pic is killer!

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

The piece is well written and so was Catcher In The Rye. As a matter of personal experience I would say for a while it feels that way when you are trying to work your steps. It passes after that as you move on to spiritual growth. Great imagery and draw.
Debby

[James K. Blaylock]

Loved it! I'm such a fan.

[James Mayfield]

I wouldn't be able to comment on commiting all seven. I tend to specialize in a select few. I really enjoyed this piece. I can see it being read as you meant but also as a commentary on addiction. very well done with this one.

[H. A. M.]

Temptation has it's price nobody ever sees the bill til it's time to pay.
Thank god for pay pal.
i like the way the reader gets drawn in slowly to his demise.
The picture works well also.
Good one and a nice warning for all.

[After Midnight]

I like the rhyming. It was pretty awesome fer sher.

m.

[Legion]

I wouldn't be surprised. Good piece.