Seven Deadly Sins

Look in to these souless eyes.

Can you tell if it’s truth or lies

I draw you in with promises of  lust

Just one kiss and you will trust

My darkness will penetrate your soul

Each step that you make will be under my control

It won’t be to long before you find

That you are slowly losing your mind

The pain that consumes you is becoming clear

But it isn’t the agony that you fear

It’s the realization that you’ve lost

And it’s more than your being that it cost

I own you more than you know

As your body is dying slow

Your heart will be the last to go

It will wither before it dies

And my laughter drowns out your cries

Because you made your final mistake

You let the evil in to claim it’s stakes

Now you will lose before you win

For you have commented the seven deadly sins

 

 

Reviews

[THERISA]

Your rhyming couplets really flows in the way, which you describes a poor soul's decent into Hell. Appealling to the basic nature of a person's lust. Creating a dark and "abandon all hope, for those, who enter here" atmosphere to the poem. Thank you for sharing this poem.

[Fran Marie]

A most descriptive and well penned write of lust's deadly sin~Well DonE!~Fran Marie

[Poeticpiers]

Lust is only one of the seven deadly sins but it can lead to the others. once you place your foot on the road it is difficult to turn back

[Sara]

this is a point to ponder, it seems like it would take a pretty bad person to commit all seven of them, though. nice poem, it's dark and creative and a unique topic to write about.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Wow, this poem is amazing. I really like this, nice write!!!

Heather

[Marie]

Nicely done.

[Fantasyfairy]

WOW. I really like this. You should add it to my group, others should read this. It is so well written, and has to be one of your best yet. XX

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

great piece of writing... i am sure some evil will come out of committing all seven sins...

[Forest Green]

Hell is certainly a topic to absorb the interest of a working imagination. It defies our earthly concepts in many ways. But you have certainly represented some aspect of it I think.

Thank you for your compelling submission.

Forest

[Natalie C]

Very dark and eerie, so true to your style Diana.
Great piece of writing, with a after thought for all how reads it....
If it isn't the hell you endure, you must be very close..

[Carole]

Sounds almost like this is written from the devil's perspective. Well written Diana. Poignant and gripping. Fallen into these clutches more than I would like to admit even if not all 7 at once, but more discerning and wise by the day. :-)