Seven Deadly Sins

Look in to these souless eyes.

Can you tell if it’s truth or lies

I draw you in with promises of  lust

Just one kiss and you will trust

My darkness will penetrate your soul

Each step that you make will be under my control

It won’t be to long before you find

That you are slowly losing your mind

The pain that consumes you is becoming clear

But it isn’t the agony that you fear

It’s the realization that you’ve lost

And it’s more than your being that it cost

I own you more than you know

As your body is dying slow

Your heart will be the last to go

It will wither before it dies

And my laughter drowns out your cries

Because you made your final mistake

You let the evil in to claim it’s stakes

Now you will lose before you win

For you have commented the seven deadly sins

 

 

Reviews

[THERISA]

Your rhyming couplets really flows in the way, which you describes a poor soul's decent into Hell. Appealling to the basic nature of a person's lust. Creating a dark and "abandon all hope, for those, who enter here" atmosphere to the poem. Thank you for sharing this poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of words and I like the description and the journey you took me with your words. I like the strong ending to this amazing poem.
Coyote

[Kim Kruger]

Diana, you are the Queen of Darkness when it comes to writing in this genre. And yes, that's a great compliment. :) No matter how macabre it may seem to readers, there's no doubting each word and line are well thought out. Nice job.

[Vampstyle]

loved it

[Dezaraye]

This is a dark piece. The flow is flawless and you've expressed this concept really well. Great job!

[G. Harrison Quay]

Well written and an interesting concept of hell and the devil's enjoyment of the lost soul's suffering. An enjoyable piece.

Jerry

[Joseph - Michael]

I'll admit that I already committed all seven sins. In fact, I've broken just only 9 commandments as well. Right at this moment, I believe that the Fate, The Karma, whatever is left out there, they all are already biting me up in my a*s, so I'm already in the hell. How's that? Quite simple, my hell is that my emotions are all screwed up and it sure does hurt far worse than hell can catch any souls. So, it's all about the fate, the karma, and so on, it's all in depends on what you've done and how you'll be judged. That's just me, you know?

Anyway, this is a real interesting write and I really did enjoyed it, but not as much as I'm not happy with my "punishments" But, hey, we all have our own personal curiousities and the curiousity really did killed the damn cat...

[Lydia Shutter]

The images in this poem are downright haunting! Absolutely wonderful poetry. Lydia

[Brette Medb]

I like this... well I always like your dark writings but this one was REALLY good.

[Dead Angel]

i love the rhyming in the poem and the description of what happens if you comment on the seven deadly sins is awesome. very well done! :)

[TL Boehm]

well done - haunting and visual poetry. Its kind of like this in my head most days but I am unable to articulate it.