Death At Your Back

It is a sense of impending doom.

 

A spine tingling chill,

 

that will penetrate you to the core.

 

It will not discriminated against you.

 

It will take you without remorse.

 

Leave you quaking in fear.

 

pleading for mercy.

 

Begging for one more chance.

 

It will leave you defenseless.

 

Harboring its curse upon those who

 

challenge it.

 

Denying absoultion.

 

When death stands at your back will you be ready.

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[John Parker]

Excellent write.....and to answer the question in this one.......I don't not fear death.....death is just the beginning to the new life beyond this earthly body.......when death comes will you strech out your hand without fear and welcome it? Can death been an worse than life? No more bodily pains, no more heart ache and no moe worries. The spirit set free from this flesh prison we reside in now.

[JC]

dark...dig it...

[Unspoken Wordz]

This poem is felt with every word through out your work. great poem.

[Sara]

Death is always waiting, but we can't waste our lives thinking about it. I liked this poem, it was good and thought provoking. The first time i really thought about dying and what it would be like was while i was watching poseidon. how odd is that?

[V. K. Harris]

Oh but there are times I am ready, But it must fear me.:) Excellent write.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Wow. This is brilliant and chilling all at the same time. Nicely done, Diana.


Great Write

[DonGilbert]

i really enjoyed this. I wish I was death, if i had to go get that...

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Chilling, and a reality that so many fear and at the same time so many embrace. Like religion, your relationship with deat is personal. You asked in this piece for each of us to evaluate our relationship with death and you did it so well. Very well written.

[Alexander Rivera]

This poem serves more as a basis or argument that humans will fight tooth in nail to stay alive. However, there's a very nihilistic tone that runs through-out the poem and it seems very matter of fact. I'll have to agree with Jake's assessment - even though it's quite dark, I think there needs a little more creative exploration, besides there being "death will find you at anytime and at any place and there's nothing you can do to change that". This is a widely accepted fact. Not to be mean or anything. All that being said, the poem itself is well-written. You know, I always dig your poems. :)

[Rain]

Great depiction of what death means to many. For me, it has never been, that you die, but how death comes. If there were a way to out smart death, a series of things you could do to avoid it..then perhaps my fear of death would reflect what your well written poem paints. Then I would damn myself for not being intelligent enough to escape it's grasp. But, death, with all it's mysteries, is inescapable, and takes the horror from it, at least for me. Still, this was a write that most people feel. The scary, unknown death is what most people feel, and you did an excellent job capturing it. Good job. Rain..

[Jake Svercek]

I think what bothers me most about this piece is the lack of expansion. I felt that every line pretty much said the exact same thing: death is there, and what are you going to do about it? Does your narrator--in the spirit of narrative voice--have any feelings about it, fears, hopes? That's the human part of writing that makes it unique, and I really couldn't see it in this piece.