Vampire Rain

A torrential down pour.

 

As crimson pools in puddles.

 

Screams thunder through the night.

 

flashes of life waming away.

 

A vampire swathed in a blood bath

 

of his own making.

 

His laughter swells like a tsunami tumbling

 

past his lips in waves of delight

 

soaked by the splatter of his victims life fluid

 

he revels in the vampire rain.

 

Reviews

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A deep and dark write.....wonderfully written and a great picture!!

[SM Davis]

CARRIE! SUPERB PICTURE and a wonderful job with the imagery to describe it! Well done!

[Nothing to see here]

Wow. Thats was absolutely brilliantly written. My favorite line(S) was (WERE) :

"His laughter swells like a tsunami tumbling

past his lips in waves of delight. "

It just makes me feel the raw energy of the moment.
Loved it.

[Kim Kruger]

Diana, in a different writer's hands this could have been nothing more than superficial gore, but the way in which you used elements of a storm/weather event to depict the vampire's blood lust is really superb.

[Brette Medb]

Extremely creepy! I liked how you kept each sentence short it built up the climax. Great write!


Brette

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

vAmpires .. gotta lovem'.. also love the picture of Carrie.. that movie and book freaked me out...
I like the poem .. nice work .

Chloe
xoxo

[nokturnal]

Very well written great flow and the imagery is amazing. Great write!!!!!!

[Genie]

I confess I'm usually not a fan of vampire lit, but you've penned a wonderfully graphic poem here, Diana! My favorite line is "his laughter swells like a tsunami." Perfect image -- I can hear it now!

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Wow! Does he use blood soap? lol jk- Vlad at his best hehe. Awesome imagery u speak of, and pretty cool photo too!

Mikey

[John Parker]

Very nice write....enjoyed reading it and love the picture you decided to use on this piece......thanks for sending the read request....

[Robert Luna]

Mmm. I love the picture Carrie is such a great movie.

I love the scene you paint here make your imagination have fun envisioning the surrounding and the act taking place. It remind me of that scene in Blade in the meat packaging plant at the rave. I could see them bathing in blood and feeling free and alive.


Great Job!!!!!!