Bleeding Heart

   I loved you through thick and thin.
I loved you through sickness and health.
I gave you the heaven and stars.
I gave you me.

I sat with my heart on my sleeve.
Bare to all.
Now I sit with my heart bleeding in my hands.

I regret every sleepless night I wasted on you
All the tears I wept.
I regret every breathe I shared with you.
Every love word that I gave selfless to you.
I regret the trust that I gave you.
I regret the vows that I honored.

You thought I was the fool.
You thought I would never know.
Your problem was… You thought.

I will go on living
I will go on believing
I will go on trusting
I will go on…
And Without You.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[T. L. O'Neal]

This is a strong poem that shows resolve and that you will go on and never look back. That's a great way to handle things, if you can't move on, you'll never go forward. Great write. T

[Stacy A. Foster]

Loss, heartbreak, regret, longing, all wrapped neatly with a white bow of strength in the end. A very nice short and to the point writing package you have here.

"I will go on living
I will go on believing
I will go on trusting
I will go on�
And Without You."

Happy Holidays!
Stacy

[Ervilha Doce]

I got chills when I read this... After what I just posted, I can't think of anything more appropriate I could have read.

The most important thing, to me, when reading or writing poetry - is that feelings come across. You've done that masterfully, here. It was poignant. Rightfully angry, a little sad, but mostly uplifting. And you lead readers swiftly to that uplifting conclusion - it was perfect. :)

[Brette Medb]

Very emotional and heart felt ... sometimes you have to face the things that hurt you the most to move on and become a stronger person. Great write.


Brette

[Dead Angel]

You thought I was the fool.
You thought I would never know.
Your problem was� You thought.

i love that part, very powerful! this poem was full of emotion; not sadness but of empowerment. even though the character is broken hearted she still finds the strength to move on and not just lie down and take it. very nice poem! :)

[Marie]

Such emotion. It flowed well. Must have been painful. Great job, Diana.

[Snow White Queen]

Very powerful. ♥ Good write and a good read.

[Autumn Dawn Gorny]

That plunge is hard and is scary. Beautifully written.

[nokturnal]

Very powerful poem I love the emotion you used while writing this. Great flow just went along as you read it. Very beautifully written.

[H. A. M.]

That b*****d. Yet he gets an ode. I like the choice of words because there's nothing too heady for me to look up. Also because it says what you want to say and it still comes off strong and not too simple or syrupafied. I get the whole story from begining to end like a mental video. Also staying on point with what you where saying.
'I will go on�
And Without You. ' I like how you ended it but I would debate you on the use of 'And' though.
Writing wise... It could go
'and I will go on
...with out you.'
Verbal wise nobodys paying attention to how they say get out of my life. As I'm writing this I notice it does add punch to it. Grammer correct or verbally to the point? Hmmm...keep using your poetic license. This is good as is.