Sounds of Sorrow

Listen to the sound of misery,
an agonizing sound so mournful
The angels weep.

Look at the face of sorrow
a look so pitiful that the angels
weep.

Feel the hurt of the unforgiven , so
painful the angels weep.
Watch as the chosen falls so unbelievable
the angels weep.

 

Reviews

[Touché Armada]

LOL, your's as well hey =) thats one reason I'm painting at the moment, my daughter can do that with me and its not morbid LOL... Angels weeping and crying, I think about that from time to time, mainly when I'm crying, mainly when I'm crying over someone else's sorrow,, I wonder where were they when we needed them,, I like the song by Shakira: How do you do... I think that sometimes, and I wonder, do they cry do any of these deities cry. The thought that they may you have put down well in which instances they may if they did.

[DonGilbert]

nice

[Vampstyle]

you are not morbid you have a great talent. I hate when angels cry.

[Heart Of A Wolf]

The chosen often times do fall. God's children don't always stay on the riteous path. We were born sinners and sinners we shall die.

[Celtic Cat]

Angels weeping isn't morbid? : ) No, it's nice. Nice to know that the angels hear our cries, feel our pain, and perhaps lessen it in doing so. I like this piece. It touches my soul.

[Joseph - Michael]

Naw, you're not being morbid, you're just trying to explore yourself in order to know how to be your own person. Believe me, I know, because I've been there and done that and still at it now.

Anyway, I really do find this writing rather enjoyable, eventhough it did affected me and sadden me in some ways...

[Clare]

First off, thank you so much for your review, I'm very new at this! I enjoyed this poem; great imagery to you too!

[Dorothy]

I absolutely love this! Very interesting thoughts and I absolutely love the flow. Great write... wouldn't even know that there is a block!

[Jake Svercek]

The repetition of the phrase "angels weep" seems to be quite unoriginal. I recognise the parallelism, but you've already done that with the beginning of each stanza, in the senses. What else do the angels do? What are they weeping about? This feels more like an introduction than a whole idea--there's so much you could develop, that you could say, or are you trying to say anything at all? I realise that it was written to shed writer's block, for which you have my sympathies, but I do not feel that it is your best work at all.

[Ice QueenJen]

This is a nice poem, and very different than your usual work. I feel there is a place for all types of writing, but you do this really well.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very sad but powerful... I am sure the angels cry a lot when they look down and see all the hate and intolerance in this world.