The Betrayer

It seem right at the time, no one would know.
Just one little taste.
Just one little taste, is what cost me my heart my dignity,
as visions of her face haunt my memories.

The pain in her eyes as my own betrayal reflects back at me,
reminding me of my moment of weakness, a moment of lust.
Now I sit here alone, wishing that I had taken another course,
instead of listening to the devils conscious as he sits
on my shoulder and whispers in my ear.

This door that separates us, it isn’t just a physical
barrier, but an emotional barricade that prevents my pleads of forgiveness.
How can I beg for forgiveness when I can not even forgive myself. I hurt her more than
possibly imaginable and for that I suffer with the consequences of my own action.

with one selfish act, i have proven myself a pathetic accuse for a man, and my only hope
is to win her love and trust back, or just die trying.

Reviews

[Gary H]

I thought the way this integrated so well with the picture was excellent. Obviously only you know if this was deliberate or not! Really tells a powerful story in so few words leaving the reader to imagine the rest. On this basis finding this new something is going to be a big part of your future work. Like the way you still keep a aura of darkness around your writing.

Great work.

[DonGilbert]

sucks to be him.

[Vampstyle]

This is great, coming from the mans point of view

[Lydia Shutter]

This is great. I liked how you took the point of view of the man in this write. Great inspiration from the graphics. I enjoyed this. lydia

[Celtic Cat]

Wonderful "try". This is deeply moving... your words made me really feel for your character. Betrayal is a b***h, and yes, very hard to forgive oneself for...have they a conscience. Excellent piece.

[James K. Blaylock]

Wow, this was really such a powerful piece. How can anyone forgive themself for inflicting such pain upon a -so called- loved one. Forgiveness can be found through heartache and time... but will trust ever bloom again?

[Dorothy]

I absolutely love it! It is interesting what one photo can provoke! Very nice thoughts and flow. It is written beautifully!

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

This was good. I love the way you put your words together very strong and full of emotions.

[Yvonne Heidt]

Yay you! I loved it.

Good luck!

[Natalie C]

with one selfish act, i have proven myself a pathetic accuse for a man, and my only hope
is to win her love and trust back, or just die trying.

Ha he can die trying, if you ask me.
Great piece Diana, I really loved how you brought across all those emotions, which usually comes after the deceit, after the lying, after that one moment of lust.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I loved it.. it is well written sure sad though.. emotional affairs of the heart.. not knowing what to do and those regrets can
eat us up...
I hope some day the forgiveness is threre.. take care

Chloe
xoxo