Trapped

Sleep induce memories from a
long ago past.
Has taking me down a lonely path.
I cry to the sandman as he laughs
From above, like my pain and misery
is his orgasmic love.

Please oh please leave me be,
these visions that hammer so
endlessly.
My mind is exhausted from all this loss,
but it isn’t just my heart that it cost.
Each night I lose just a little of me,
that person I once use to be.
Something inside me has seem to snap,
as mere mortality has come to pass.

Please help me,
Help me.....
Wake me up from this madness,
a loneliness full of sadness.

Take away this agony that resides inside my soul,
the pieces of what use to be me, whole.

My sorrow lost to the masses of despair,
flanked by the horror of knowing my heart
has been stripped bare.

I am trapped in my own head in a drugged
state of my own stupidity , all I ask is to wake
from this dream of longevity.
or lose myself forever in the bleak darkness of
death,
the only end to this hell is with my last breath.

This coma that keeps me under, screams for release
as the last sound I hear is a long steady beep.

 

 

 

Reviews

[*** Hey Jude***]

You have painted a masterpiece with language! I know what it feels like to have your heart ripped continuously to the piont that death seems the only release. Well Done ~ N

[Tamme]

Awesome use of imagery, makes this poem come to life. Good writing.

[Stacy A. Foster]

Someone is about to crack! Very nice write, gets into one's head. We could be flatlined in life as well as death. The pic for this fits perfectly.
This writing screams out for a frustration resolution, going out of one's mind, thinking we're losing ourselves... a scary thought.

This makes me think of an invalid and what it would be like to be in that coma state simply wanting to die, hopefully moving on to something better (soul's release).

Cheers,
Stacy

[John Stussy]

This was great, I love how you relate the perspective of someone on their deathbed to us all. It really brought me into it, I felt the despair, even saw the hospital room with my eyes closed. The closure of that sound, that long beep... It's one of the coldest sounds I know of, so impersonal and upfrontly final.

[Fantasyfairy]

A nice refection of thinking and wishing of death. Lonely, and sad. The picture adds to this too. It is written nicely, and flows well. A nice piece of work, if that is the right phase to use for such a depressing, and dark poem. XX

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DAMN!!! This totally blew me away, and it's so very true what you wrote too. Man, you've captured the very essence of the darkness in the 'troubled self' so well. Yes, I definitely feel this pretty much everyday- truly unbearable, and agonizing, i swear, ugh! You've captured the pain amazingly well here. When reading, I was putting this into a rap beat in my head. It so goes with it hehe!

Very Brilliantly Composed!

Mikey

[Natalie C]

Diana, this was such a brilliant piece. I just loved how you used a coma as a metaphor, describing your state of mind. Deliciously dark and wonderfully described. Feelings that one usually try to hide.
Just loved your ending - the long beep!

Brilliant!

[Crazy Cat Man]

Wow....I'm speechless....and i feel the same way sometimes.....when the past just haunts you. A chilling piece.

[Lydia Shutter]

Terrifying dark words....written well. Lydia

[Nana Carmine]

Wow- I really like it. It's dark and sad. i know how it feels- when you would rather endure death then suffer more heart break. Great job

[Yaooooooo]

Please oh please leave me be,

Maybe you trying to say Please oh please let me be,

It just didnt flow with the rest of the poem. Overall is a good peace, I dont really see how the picture relates to the poem. From what i got the person is supposto be in a coma so maybe i missunderstood.. Overall a good read and i enjoyed it.
Keep them coming and look forward to reading new material.
One!