A Ghost upon my Heart

You are standing there but you look right through me.

I speak but you do not answer.

My foot steps make no sound.

If I had a heart it would be breaking.

I long to touch you, but If i try my hand

would pass through you.

My nearness is just a chill in the night

I feel tears but they do not fall.

As the wind sweeps me away.

A ghost upon your memories.

a ghost upon my heart.

 

Reviews

[Taja B.]

This poem is so somberful, but good. It's pretty well written, and I liked the metaphor of feeling empty.however, even if the ghost is not a metaphor, this is still a good piece that is so haunting, but is so vivid of emotion.

Nice job. Thanks for sharing.:)

[Stacy A. Foster]

Hmmm... a ghost or unrequited love? I like this. We have all felt invisible to some at one time or another.

My favorite line:
My nearness is just a chill in the night.

Short, but so very sweet.

Cheers,
Stacy :)

[Robert Luna]

Sad piece but the image was perfect. I liked the thought that you conveyed with this piece. Making the reader feel the presence of a ghostly love that has moved to the other side and still longs to have the love they once knew. I like that thought and have often wondered about that situation taking place.


Wonderfully Done!!!!

[Diane]

A sad but beautiful write and full of emotions that are still there..well done you..Diane

[Bubo]

Very ghostly............be it in life or death, once someone has moved on and you have not been ready it can
be so heart breaking.............well captured emotions.

[MLG]

Outstanding poem - I felt the emotion in this with every word!

[All faded blue]

Wistful longing portrayed in words on the page. You expressed so well your feelings!!! Nice flow and emotion. I think anyone who has experience loss can relate to this one. Please keep writing these. Am adding this to my personal stash.

All faded blue

[H. A. M.]

Romanticly sad. A ghost that slowly fades after time. The picture works well with this also. I like the way you paint the picture of the dead mourning for the living. Very well written.

[Marie]

Beautifully written and sad. Haunting.

[Dezaraye]

This is a beautiful and sad poem. It flows well and paints such a hearbreaking picture. Thanks for sharing.