This reminds me of the character that I created Countess Evelynn Valkzak, and her great sadness she has for her life. I do love your Vampire poem and your idea here. But I feel that it could be written better, I believe you can do it, because of the other poetry that I have already review and they are wonderful. Please don't take this to heart, and stop what you do best, I'm not saying you are an awful poet, I'm stating you have the talent just put it to the test, and write your best...This poem needs a little something to make it like your rest, wonderful.
Oh Diana, I just simply adore your dark pieces, makes me feel right at home. :D Part of the club of souls that was left broken, to fend for themselves in the darkness!
Beautiful to the eye, yet ugliness is her life..
She is Forever cursed, she lives to see others die,
and she will always cry blood tears.
Chills right to the bone.
Brilliant write, definitely going to my favs!
This reminds me of the character that I created Countess Evelynn Valkzak, and her great sadness she has for her life. I do love your Vampire poem and your idea here. But I feel that it could be written better, I believe you can do it, because of the other poetry that I have already review and they are wonderful. Please don't take this to heart, and stop what you do best, I'm not saying you are an awful poet, I'm stating you have the talent just put it to the test, and write your best...This poem needs a little something to make it like your rest, wonderful.
Once where there had been beauty and sunshine is now only
darkness and shadows.
I think this line sums up the write nicely. There's sadness, regret, loneliness, betrayal, and a touch of resentment in this. I used to dream about becoming a vampire all the time. I watched a LOT of vampire films when I was younger and still have a weakness for just about anything with a vamp in it. :) This is another write about a vampire with a soul. Yes, I'm a big Angel fan. :)
I enjoyed this and like how it was written from the vampires new perspective.
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