Forbidden Fruit

With burning passion her loins were yearning;

For his red lips, soft kisses giving,

For his hands, with tender lust grabbing.

Restless savages, forever hungry for an unfulfilled desire.

 

There comes a point in temptation,

When the want overtakes the guilt.

The hedonism prevails the righteousness,

And unfaithful feels more like fulfillment

 

With a pheromonal urge of pure desire,

She accepted his brazen approach.

Their eyes, lips and limbs entwined.

She took a bite of the forbidden fruit. 

Reviews

[William Wapi]

I remember reading this poem last week and I am not sure I reviewed it. I love it, especially that line; "There comes a point in Temptation when the want overtakes the guilt...", that line made the poem. Good work!

[Nirmala]

How realistic and yet reasoning despite the blindness of passion... I particularly like the lines:

There comes a point in temptation,
When the want overtakes the guilt.
The hedonism prevails the righteousness,
And unfaithful feels more like fulfillment

[dianalondon]

I am very happy that you enjoyed reading this poem! Thank you so much for your sweet review. :)

[Megan]

This is very inticing in that it makes me fantasize and stop dead in my tracks. Very good. :)

[dianalondon]

Thank you so much Megan! Yes this is quite a personal piece on mine. Very gal you enjoyed reading this!

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Beautiful write, loved it.

Kaze~ :-D

[dianalondon]

Thank you very much!! :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-D

[ron]

Great poem. Yes sometimes this does happen, lust and the draw to a forbidden fruit can be very strong.

[dianalondon]

Thank you for that review! Yeah that's exactly what I wanted to portray, I'm glad you understand my work :)

[ron]

You are most welcome :)

[kitty cat]

l think it is good, love it, good writing

[dianalondon]

Thank you very much, very happy you liked it! :)

[kitty cat]

that ok hope you write more

[UC Poika]

Ouch! Just kidding. Nice poem, well written and everything. I never did much of that sort of thing, if you mean cheating too and I wonder is there really more to it than just another sexual high? Not to belittle the wonderful scene you painted. Good job.

[dianalondon]

Thank you for great review! :) Yeah there probably is more to cheating that just the 'sexual high', but I think the primary main cause of adultery in many cases is the raw, animalistic, pheramonal desire one human being has for another that they fail to control. My aim was to capture the epitome of that electrifying and tense moment.

[UC Poika]

And that you did. Thanks for sharing.

[Gama Rays]

whoa, I love the figures of speech used in this poem, the diction really triggers imagination of the scene. wonderful.

[dianalondon]

Thank you very much for that review! I am glad you liked this poem! :)

[Vani Jalagar]

wow !!!! this an awesome piece of writing....:) enjoyed every line :)

[dianalondon]

Thank you so much for your kind words, glad you enjoyed this! :)

[FlatLineBeauty]

Wow! I love the picture that was painted in my mind here. You didn't have to go too deep in detail, but just the words there were just mind blowing and you could tell where they were going. You could see the seduction and the moment they gave into pure desire and passion. I enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing.

[dianalondon]

Im really glad that you understand what I tried to portray through the words of this poem. Thank you for the wonderful review!