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A Poem by KittyKatgirl
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A girl who witnesses someone going through depression and did nothing about it till it was too late.

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They say you are ugly,
They say you are horrendous,
But you are lovely,
And in my eyes you are gorgeous.

I see you walk through the hallway all alone,
You start to wish you stayed at home,
But even there you are not safe,
From the taunts from your father whenever he was in a furious chafe.

I see you sitting under a tree,
Your face is hiding behind your hands,
As you cry with unanswered pleas,
I am the only one who can see the scars under your arm bands.

You say you just want to take the pain away,
You think self harm is the only way,
But really its not okay,
I swear tomorrow will be a brand new day.

You hide in your bedroom,
Behind a locked door,
You feel abandoned,
As you grab the knife from your draw.

I am at your funeral,  not many people came,
Most of them didn't even know your name,
I am the one to blame,
I could've helped but now it's too late and I bow my head in shame.

© 2015 KittyKatgirl


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You just wrote amazing, while reading I wish the poem should not end. Every inch I was shifting my eyes it was like a picture of some unknown sorrow sprinted in front of me.
A perfect beginning , awesome middle, and a painful ending.
It was just like a image of myself in the written form, and that is what defines writer and his power of pen and thoughts.
Wonderful write!


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Watch out for HansJizzy and don't be taken in by him because he's the worst ever troll. Even got hold of another writers personal mobile number somehow, then called up and made unpleasant comments about the writers family; and he's done other personal stuff to people.

I'm bugging his a*s in the hope he'll go away and leave all the decent folk alone, trouble is though I think he gets off on all the attention. You must have noticed how he hardly gets anyone making comments on his stuff, it's because he's so rude and nasty to people, especially some of the female writers on this site. Take this advice or leave it, either way, at least I've told you.


Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

KittyKatgirl

8 Years Ago

I know who he is. He has left a review on this poem in fact and hence how I knew about what a troll .. read more
Not here

8 Years Ago

i just argue with him because yeah. he's a bit dumb. alot.
This was sweet
Try to use more poetic devices and have a purpose behind your writing
Either way, good luck

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

KittyKatgirl

8 Years Ago

I had another look at this review lol. ANd by the way this poem does have a purpose lol. My purpose .. read more
Littlelady

8 Years Ago

Fair enough
Wow... that is powerful. That made me tear up. It's incredible how depression can really infect your mind, and spirit. And how sometimes, you feel as if being the shoulder for the person is not enough.

Posted 8 Years Ago


How many more pity poems about depressed 'misunderstood' suicides are we going to have to sit through? There is this pathetic movement to artificially empower weakness in western society these past 20 or so years. It's everywhere and it's annoying. Eventually, it will be the downfall of originality... weakness itself does not create, self actualization does... artificially inducing that in people who don't really have that in them will dilute every form of quality we know of. Depressed to the point of suicide? Do it then, relieve the suffering... if a person wants to die who the f**k are you to make them feel guilty about it? It's the selfish egotism of the shallow altruistic. Deep down, you people don't care, you just want to be seen "caring". Also, your writing is average maybe below average. Even if you're new to poetry or prose, I can tell your voice is dog s**t. This wasn't the first thing of yours I read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Davidgeo

8 Years Ago

No, the way you go about everything is why I think that. How you talk, how you made a fake profile,.. read more
Jadennf13

8 Years Ago

So full of yourself I see, no this was made to help friends, to give them help where they need it, n.. read more
Davidgeo

8 Years Ago

Hush now dear.... your idiot is showing. You should probably stop talking now... but you won't, you.. read more
Very well done Crystal....A very true write and im sure many people will find this inspiring and hope for a new day....Full of message my frnd.....100 ratings.....

Posted 8 Years Ago


I read am article lately about a man who lived near a bridge who took daily walks there....witnessing many jumpers of many who he saved by inviting them for a cup of tea with his family.

Sad. True. Sometimes people break.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is so sad, but so very true. Many people try and put the blame on themselves "maybe if I did that" or 'maybe if I did this" you know about the scars, but you don't say a thing, you know about their problems, but you leave it alone. Small things that maybe you could've said something about but didn't, so not it's your fault. It's a sad way of feeling and it's vividly expressed in this poem. I thoroughly enjoyed this:) that you for sharing

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is fantastic. If your goal was to evoke such deep emotions from a reader, you have succeeded! You are very talented! I cannot wait to read more!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Very interesting topic to write about.
depression is really hard and this person obviously had an extremely severe case of it.
Its also really hard on the people that love you to watch you go through it.
As you state in this story. I
Shocking ending guilt ate her up that bad she killed herself to.
Really moving, deep, emotional write, i enjoyed reading it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Very sad poem that tells an almost depressing story. Very well written great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago



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