The First Kiss

First attempt at haiku

Resounding silence
Two bodies anticipate
Beautiful sparks fly

Author's Note

First attempt at Haiku, wayyyy harder than anticipated (and trust me I never thought it would be easy). Much respect to people that can actually pull this off

Reviews

[JenLyn]

Pretty good :)

[Rachel U.]

Not bad, not bad. Haikus can be very difficult to get your point/emotion across (which is why they're generally focused on the abstract and emotionless theme of nature, lol), but you did quite well here. Try a few more, I would love to see them. :)
If I have any critique for this, it's for the awful style of font and colour. ;) I prefer something a little more classy and a little less bubble-esque in nature. Regardless, I still liked it.

[deeps]

This is lovely and beuatiful.
Amazing Haiku!