Driving Away from Me

Flourescent lights, cold

Make me a drone

In a closed space, bubbles

Lean over here

Kick me

Beg my attention

Confidence trip, bold

Color me sold

You were fool's gold, trouble

Tell me I'm wrong

Force me

Straighten my head

That's what you did, told

You told me no

Rose tinted eyes, betrayed

Thought for so long

But wrong

Back to the foe

In corporate hell, mode

I conceal this

Now after waiting, unfazed

New dissonance

You show

A friendship ends

I'd continue, road

If you'd travel

Over with me, journey

If you get passed

The one

Who entertains you

Here I wait, cold

Yet no other

Has such a hold, worry

Worry I do

It will

Never come through

Reviews

[Ella]

Amazing. So full of dark emotions. The end is so...strong, i loved it. Very well written.

[Dillon Gay]

Thanks for your input, Ella! Yeah, funny thing is, the last stanza just kind of came out. I'd have to agree, it is really the truest to the raw feeling. The rest of them took at least two minutes to write each, but that one was a pure flow of consciousness that was typeed in maybe 20 seconds or so. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and it has given me insight on the creative process and how emotional outbursts create more effective art than methodical verse with set word pattern/style. Again, it is mucho appreciated!

[Ella]

It was my pleasure. I agree completely with you on that. The ones that made the most impact were the ones that i kind of just wrote with out thinking. In the midst of my emotions. Those ended up being more real because they were closer to the heart. Keep up the great work i'd be happy to read more.