Drifter

Blowen from here to there

Drifting carelessly

Like dandilion seed heads

blowen away by

wishful children

 

Drfiting across

cities

towns and

feilds

 

Unless

hopeful souls

grsap those drifters

and keep them

 

grounded

Author's Note

construcive critisim please :)

Reviews

[WhoIsAmelia?]

I love these lines:

Like dandilion seed heads
blowen away by
wishful children

I like how the absence of punctuation creates one run-on sentence, really emphasizing the subject of drifting. Perhaps end in a period though, right after grounded, to create the feel of an anchor?

Love it though! True to your usual whimsical style. However, the first word is misspelled. Were you trying to say "Blown" or "Blowing"? If you were trying to say "Blowed" that would be improper and bla bla bla, you probably don't care but you asked for criticism so I criticized. :P

Nicely done

[Lily Mae]

Grasping for dreams and miracles...I love it...x Beautifully expressed...