sundogs

quick fact lighting is known to hit men more likely than women btw main character in this is a girl :P

in a dark world glimmer of hopes arise

in desperate times help is given

to those who don't deserve it

lights a the end of tunnels are seen

comets fly across the skies

lighting strikes rarely twice

i was hit twice in a row

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fighting so hard in darkness

relying on the moon

pale and weak for some light

for guidance

that is 

until i say the sun

small and weak

but still shining

the smell of 

summer honeysuckle

filling my nose

a lamp like click

all goes dark 

his laughter echoes 

my brain is fuzzy

my heart screams not fair

yet he continues to laugh

he says that he didn't lie

that it was all real

the trick was scientific

sun dogs,  he smiles

i am trapped ever more in this darkness

now with only false glimmers of hope

from the outside world

relying once again on the frail moon

once again he pushed my behind

and controlled my actions

professionals say they can help

but he's never going away

i blame that cloudy night

walking home

relying on the waning moon for light

till i was hit 

and he rose to power

he voice echoes in my head

as i pushed him deep inside my head

his voice slithers from crevices

sssssuunndddogggssssss

i look up to the frail moon

for guidance and

escape

 

Author's Note

i would really appreciate it if you guys sent some improvements etc because i have a good idea but it seems to be missing something plus my poems kinda suck :D

Reviews

[TJ]

that picture is creepy!! anyway you got a few spelling errors but nothing I would consider too serious...Very good piece rich in emotion and imagery...i can feel the pain in this one, the unwilling submission and manipulation, the despair of darkness.
good