Limerick-3

Limerick-3

A Poem by Devanshu Rajput
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An attempt to make you laugh!

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There once was a man who had no hair

He feared from heat he could not bear

with the sun on his head

He can bake eggs and bread,

Which he promised some day he would share.

 

© 2015 Devanshu Rajput


Author's Note

Devanshu Rajput
Please do help me to make it a real limerick. I appreciate your presence here. Thanks to alf and FT Ledrew, for granting more beauty to this piece,

Devanshu

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Dear Devanshu,

Well it did make me laugh! Well done Limerick. Content was good, rhyming was good......syllables a litte out but that's ok, you made a mighty effort here my friend! A very worthy contest submission, thank you so much for joining in!

For the edification of others who are not sure what the format is, here is the form requirements for limericks.

A limerick is a humorous poem consisting of five lines.

The first, second, and fifth lines must have seven to ten syllables
while rhyming and having the same verbal rhythm.

The third and fourth lines only have to have five to seven syllables,
and have to rhyme with each other and have the same rhythm.

It all sounds very complicated but once you get the hang of it, it's smooth sailling!

Here is a link you might like to take a peek at poets

http://www.poetry4kids.com/blog/lessons/how-to-write-a-limerick/



Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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HAHAHA! Perfecto. Reminded me of Shel Silverstein.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

Who can forget Uncle Shelby? Thanks for reading.

Devanshu
Mayank

9 Years Ago

Yes, I was feeling down few weeks back and I kept on reading his books. I felt better, keep it up. L.. read more
It was funny alright..!
liked the rhymes..i actually sang it and it sounded really good
the syllables maybe werent all matched up but it flowed along nicely
good work:)


ps: sorry for the late review, was occupied with work

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

Sorry that syllable count was not perfect. Glad you liked it.

Devanshu
Rajagopala Rao Srinadhuni

9 Years Ago

Don't be it's a good one...and for the syllables try singing it out..that sort of helps me sometimes.. read more
Funny!!!! A childish poem I loved it....

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

Thanks for it.

Devanshu
this was good:-)funny:-).

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

Thanks for it.

Devanshu
Wonderful creation bro.
that was fuuny..

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

Thanks for it.

Devanshu
Dear Devanshu,

Well it did make me laugh! Well done Limerick. Content was good, rhyming was good......syllables a litte out but that's ok, you made a mighty effort here my friend! A very worthy contest submission, thank you so much for joining in!

For the edification of others who are not sure what the format is, here is the form requirements for limericks.

A limerick is a humorous poem consisting of five lines.

The first, second, and fifth lines must have seven to ten syllables
while rhyming and having the same verbal rhythm.

The third and fourth lines only have to have five to seven syllables,
and have to rhyme with each other and have the same rhythm.

It all sounds very complicated but once you get the hang of it, it's smooth sailling!

Here is a link you might like to take a peek at poets

http://www.poetry4kids.com/blog/lessons/how-to-write-a-limerick/



Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Devanshu: I enjoyed it....I did laugh and you present a great visual. Don't know if I'd want to eat the eggs or bread. Thought about cave men and lack of fire: Think they had too much hair. Don't even know the style or format for a limerick. Great work and please keep writing. Thank you...Dale

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

Please do see the review of Mrs. Helena. You will know much about Limerick.

You also .. read more
This is definitely interesting. I've never written a limerick (not sure how to/what the format is), but I enjoy the picture that was created with what you have here. Nice work, thank you for sharing :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

Please have a look of Mrs. Helena's review. You will get to know about Limericks.

Tha.. read more
Ah, bless...I love the last visual :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

Thanks for it.

Devanshu
Nice you gave me a chuckle sad but birds of prey will think a bald head is a stone and may drop a turtle on it in attempts to crack it open

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

hahaha. You also gave me a chuckle(A big one, I might add)

Thanks for reading.
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W R Stowe

9 Years Ago

your quite welcome

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