Limerick-3

An attempt to make you laugh!

There once was a man who had no hair

He feared from heat he could not bear

with the sun on his head

He can bake eggs and bread,

Which he promised some day he would share.

 

Author's Note

Please do help me to make it a real limerick. I appreciate your presence here. Thanks to alf and FT Ledrew, for granting more beauty to this piece,

Devanshu

Reviews

[Helen Crutchett]

Dear Devanshu,

Well it did make me laugh! Well done Limerick. Content was good, rhyming was good......syllables a litte out but that's ok, you made a mighty effort here my friend! A very worthy contest submission, thank you so much for joining in!

For the edification of others who are not sure what the format is, here is the form requirements for limericks.

A limerick is a humorous poem consisting of five lines.

The first, second, and fifth lines must have seven to ten syllables
while rhyming and having the same verbal rhythm.

The third and fourth lines only have to have five to seven syllables,
and have to rhyme with each other and have the same rhythm.

It all sounds very complicated but once you get the hang of it, it's smooth sailling!

Here is a link you might like to take a peek at poets

http://www.poetry4kids.com/blog/lessons/how-to-write-a-limerick/

[Nirupama.H]

Really nice.... I cannot be of much help technically but the piece is very nice.
Certainly made me laugh !! :))

[Devanshu Rajput]

Limerick is all about making people laugh. Thanks for reading.

D

[Kshitij Srivastava]

It certainly did make me smile and well done with the rhyming and the metering. ☺

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for the review.

Devanshu

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Good one Devanshu... humour is the most difficult thing to write... I have tried it many times and failed most of the times... but this is one very well written.. good one...:)

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for the compliment. Ya, it is hard but only until you practice and get a hang of it, then it will be a cakewalk.

Devanshu

[Michele Harman]

I found that hilarious. very good job. Helena did a good job commenting on some of the technical aspects.

[Leena Madhuri]

haha cool!!! that's great! i like it!

[Triny Silverglass]

i love it, it is funny and has some strong images

[Devanshu Rajput]

I'm glad you liked it.

Devanshu

[Passengerr]

Funny piece Devanshu, i would think thrice before eating his eggs and bread though:-)

[Devanshu Rajput]

So would I. Lol

Thanks for stopping by.

Devanshu

[Passengerr]

You're welcome Devanshu.

[Avinash]

This is an old tale retold in a very lyrical way. We are also waiting for egg and baked that way to be shared with us. Kudos.

[Devanshu Rajput]

I will advice not to have them. They can be mixed with his sweat and what not. lol

I am glad you liked it. Thanks for stumbling upon it.

Devanshu

[Lyndy]

Hahaha. I like this one a lot! It's a funny and nice poem! :D

[Devanshu Rajput]

I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for reading.

Devanshu

[msharma]

Remarkably good penning done. Keep it up

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for reading.

Devanshu