I am a long forgotten soul

I am a long forgotten soul

A Poem by Devanshu Rajput
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A poem written by me, for CHAUCERIAN RONDEL ~ Blue Rose Cafe Challenge!. Please read the note by me,after reading this.

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I am a very long forgotten soul,

I have nothing of which I can take pride,        

I am dwindling with my every stride.

 

I am having no path to stroll,

Every time I try to try, I am thrown aside,            

I am a long forgotten soul.


In my life there is nothing like a goal, 

There is not even He with me as my Guide.          

There is no one to whom I can abide.

I am a long forgotten soul.   




© 2015 Devanshu Rajput


Author's Note

Devanshu Rajput
It is a Chaucerian Rondel. Written for the following contest:-

http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/CHAUCERIAN-RONDEL-~-Blue-Rose-Cafe-Challenge%21/51208/

Thanks to Helena Mam, who helped improve it.

As, always, be critical while reviewing.

I thank, Tate, for teaching me effective use of meter, which I have employed here.

(Image source:- Google)

http://www.flickr.com/photos/42305475@N03/10005876675

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Devanshu: I liked your poem very much and would like to say Congratulations on a job well done. It is so very somber and deep, but the tone is straightforward, as if to say I am what I am. It's interesting, and the character of the long forgotten soul seems somewhat nonemotional as if to say; no one cares; I am lost, why should I care; there is no hope at all, no matter how hard I try. Thank you so very much. Great work. Dale

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

Thanks for reading and reviewing. I am glad you like it.

Devanshu
Confuser

9 Years Ago

You're very welcome. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you! Dale
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When we walk on HIS path, we might don't know where we will be taken.

Your lines shows that you are guided. :)

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

Well, this poem is not from my personal experience. It an attempt to convey the state, that a pessim.. read more
Jeyanthi

9 Years Ago

Its okay.
I can also understand that you have written this for fun. :)
I too feel that... lack of inspiration ...
relatable!! well done!!

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Jeyanthi

9 Years Ago

I shouldn't have interrupted you guys in first place. Sorry!
Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

no, problem, Jeyanhi.

Devanshu
Amulya Bhardwaj

9 Years Ago

Nah dear..its totally alright... ;)
I can somehow relate to this writing..the urge to do something yet not receiving the proper kick off and the moral support and finally feel like a neglected soul.
Nicely expressed:)

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

Thanks for reviewing mu piece and stopping by.I am glad you liked it.

Devanshu
I sometimes feel the same way. I too, realized, I'm not alone for He is by my side, their to help guide, my way through life. Ty for sharing

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

Really thanks, for reviewing and stopping by. That means a lot to me.

Devanshu
Country Girl46

9 Years Ago

I am anxious to read more of you poetry.
"only goal is my guide".... too good...brilliant read my friend

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Devanshu Rajput

9 Years Ago

Thanks, for the review........

Devanshu

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