Devanshu: I liked your poem very much and would like to say Congratulations on a job well done. It is so very somber and deep, but the tone is straightforward, as if to say I am what I am. It's interesting, and the character of the long forgotten soul seems somewhat nonemotional as if to say; no one cares; I am lost, why should I care; there is no hope at all, no matter how hard I try. Thank you so very much. Great work. Dale
This poem is very well written. Your writing ability successfully generating a nice, dark atmosphere, and the poem itself flows really well. Fantastic job! :)
Thanks for the review. i too, have heard of this style. I have just crafted this poem in accordance .. read moreThanks for the review. i too, have heard of this style. I have just crafted this poem in accordance of the rules laid in the Helena's contest.
Thanks for stopping by. I am glad you liked it.
Devanshu
9 Years Ago
Errata:-
In the first line I meant, I too have heard of this for the first time. read moreErrata:-
In the first line I meant, I too have heard of this for the first time.
hmmmm this poem sounds to me like someone who beleives they are owed something for living, i on the other hand believe that we exist at all is the most miraculous thing and nothing to be thrown away in self pity
I know - maybe sounds harsh but for me knowing my only purpose in life is to love, exist and create is more than enough to share XX
There, in he "H" is capitalized. So, it simply implies God.
You are right, one shoul.. read moreThere, in he "H" is capitalized. So, it simply implies God.
You are right, one should be optimistic in life, like you. But, there are many people who are victims of depression for numerous reasons. I have written this for those pessimistic fellows.
Thanks for reading and stopping by.
Devanshu
9 Years Ago
Yes you are fifth I should always remember there are two sides to a coin just like duality everythin.. read moreYes you are fifth I should always remember there are two sides to a coin just like duality everything must balance :-) Xx
This reminds me of all the moments when I felt like I was just wandering aimlessly through life, until I finally found my inspiration and purpose. Very powerful theme that you have here, with some great lines to convey it.
If I may, I would like to suggest one teeny tiny thing. Try not to sacrifice the grammar for the sake of the rhyme scheme or the meter. All three should work together harmoniously to convey your ideas.
Thank you for reminding me to be grateful, simply for the fact that I know my purpose in life.
I am grateful of kind words of yours....but, I would highly br obliged if you can point out the gram.. read moreI am grateful of kind words of yours....but, I would highly br obliged if you can point out the grammer mistakes in it.
I want to make my writing a good one. You said write all those three factors a re very crucial.
Dear visitor,
The above graphic is message from the very core of my heart. This is indeed my abode. It has been a very long time that I am here on this site.
To be honest, this site, in my .. more..