I am a long forgotten soul

A poem written by me, for CHAUCERIAN RONDEL ~ Blue Rose Cafe Challenge!. Please read the note by me,after reading this.

 

I am a very long forgotten soul,

I have nothing of which I can take pride,        

I am dwindling with my every stride.

 

I am having no path to stroll,

Every time I try to try, I am thrown aside,            

I am a long forgotten soul.

In my life there is nothing like a goal, 

There is not even He with me as my Guide.          

There is no one to whom I can abide.

I am a long forgotten soul.   

Author's Note

It is a Chaucerian Rondel. Written for the following contest:-

http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/CHAUCERIAN-RONDEL-~-Blue-Rose-Cafe-Challenge%21/51208/

Thanks to Helena Mam, who helped improve it.

As, always, be critical while reviewing.

I thank, Tate, for teaching me effective use of meter, which I have employed here.

(Image source:- Google)

http://www.flickr.com/photos/42305475@N03/10005876675

Reviews

[Confuser]

Devanshu: I liked your poem very much and would like to say Congratulations on a job well done. It is so very somber and deep, but the tone is straightforward, as if to say I am what I am. It's interesting, and the character of the long forgotten soul seems somewhat nonemotional as if to say; no one cares; I am lost, why should I care; there is no hope at all, no matter how hard I try. Thank you so very much. Great work. Dale

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for reading and reviewing. I am glad you like it.

Devanshu

[Confuser]

You're very welcome. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you! Dale

[alf]

Hi Devanshu RajputA very well structured rondel!! I so enjoyed reading this and I wish you well in the contest, alf.

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for the review. The contest is over my friend. I secured first position in it.

Thanks again for devoting your precious time upon my work. It is highly appreciated.

Deavanshu

[alf]

Well deserved!!! Congratulations, alf

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for it. I am humbled by your words.

Devanshu

[micky]

I love this piece...the flow is beautiful and the images are amazing
Well dobe

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for this. It really means a lot to me.

Devanshu

[AaronFreitas]

This is an awesome poem my friend!!! Definitely poet of the year worthy :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for it, I am glad you liked it.

Devanshu

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong and powerful thoughts in the poem.
"I am having no path to stroll,
Every time I try to try, I am thrown aside,
I am a long forgotten soul."
Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks Sir, for this. I guess you voted in the contest too.

Thanks for this again.read moreThanks Sir, for this. I guess you voted in the contest too.

Thanks for this again.

Devanshu

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome. I read all three poems my friend. Of course.

[Tate Morgan]

Hi dev nice onw I am sorry it took so long to get over here

[Devanshu Rajput]

Hi, there! You have provided so much help that you do need to be here. Your help and support is what I have with me. I will keep your every lesson with me, 'till my last breath.

Devanshu

[Tom]

A well penned discerning write, lots of yearning and angst which add to the stature and quality of the poem!

[Devanshu Rajput]

I am glad you liked it. Thanks for stopping by. That means a lot.

Devanshu

[Helen Crutchett]

Thank you Tate and Devanshu for more edification of this Form!

Helena

[Ama May Cooper]

Gentle and sombre. A lovely piece of work I enjoyed reading it