Devanshu: I liked your poem very much and would like to say Congratulations on a job well done. It is so very somber and deep, but the tone is straightforward, as if to say I am what I am. It's interesting, and the character of the long forgotten soul seems somewhat nonemotional as if to say; no one cares; I am lost, why should I care; there is no hope at all, no matter how hard I try. Thank you so very much. Great work. Dale
Its the most powerful means of expressing your emotions...I mean the way you have written it is just fabulous. The flow is really amazing...And I am sure everyone can relate it somewhere sometimes in their life.
Even I do so...This is awesome because of the way it is, No other words can replace it. Word power and rhyme scheme decorate it even more beautifully.
As an exercise, an experiment even.. you've achieved such a fine result and that of course, was your objective. However, there's a heavy sadness woven in the work that makes it less an achievement and more a spiritual or certainly an emotional release - true or not, tis very powerful.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Certainly it is. I think the poem is more for releasing internal emotions rather than acheving perfe.. read moreCertainly it is. I think the poem is more for releasing internal emotions rather than acheving perfection. Main motive is to showcase yourself, if I by any means have achieved it I think I am there, where I longed to be.
Thanks for passing by and commenting. Highly privileged to have your words as review upon my work. I appreciate your insight.
Contests are fun and challenging.. I think you met that challenge and did a great job! Your poem sounds so forlorn when read aloud. Which is what I think you wanted... Well Done
I will not forget you. Nice words .
P.s. just don't let them forget :)
I think everyone feels thrown aside sometimes.
You express much emotion in this.
Thank You for sharing, Holly
Thanks for passing by and commenting upon my work
I appreciate it.
Devanshu
9 Years Ago
I'm not passing by; I know you, my friend. Lol. Welcome.
9 Years Ago
..lol...to be honest , today i ain't on my regular device....i am operating another unfamilar device.. read more..lol...to be honest , today i ain't on my regular device....i am operating another unfamilar device,,,,that's typing is difficult....i meant to write stopping by, not passing by.
i too know u....it is sometimes gud to laugh...lol...
Well i am not even around you as a poet to critically review your poem. I can just say it is an amazing poem with emotions all people feel sometime in their life. Enjoyed reading :-)
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Don't say that please. Everyone is good. You really write great.
Thanks for those com.. read moreDon't say that please. Everyone is good. You really write great.
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