Haiku-1

enjoy my first Haiku

                

  Water flows like music

Cold breeze seems to dance

Mountain stands alone there

 

Reviews

[Willard Wells]

While the count could use work, the content and words are beautiful. Like you said, it's your first one. I mess up my count all the time. Some I correct the count and some I just leave to stand alone without the Haiku or Senryu attachment. It is all up to you since this is your vision and words. Thanks for sharing beautiful words.

[Miss Sharon]

This is a very lovely haiku! Perfect form. ~Sharon

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for reading and for your kind words.

Devanshu

[Miss Sharon]

You are quite welcome! ~Sharon

[closed]

I like poems on nature
this one spoke pretty vividly


-Dream

[Devanshu Rajput]

I am glad, that you liked it.......

Devanshu

[Shivam Murari]

This was a beautiful description. Enjoyed the pics too.

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks for the review......

Devanshu

[Shivam Murari]

You're welcome.

[Rita L. Sev]

I did enjoy this haiku, Devanshu! Lovely sensory images; nature is smiling at your homage!

[Devanshu Rajput]

I am really thankful of your both reviews, as I have always been.....Your reviews are always of great help to.....Thanks for stopping by.....

Devanshu

[Leslie Philibert]

Great poem, if you want to write more check out the Tanka form, great.

[Devanshu Rajput]

There is no question, that I want want to write more. I will definitely check out that....Thanks for stopping by.....

Devanshu

[Amanda Dawn Sanderson-G..]

The description is so beautiful in such a short amount of words that I had hoped you'd continue with more lines in the Haiku! Beautifully put, thank you for sharing.

[Devanshu Rajput]

I wished to add lines but Haiku didn't allow me more than three lines.

Thanks for stopping by.

Devanshu

[Amanda Dawn Sanderson-Greer]

Actually that is untrue, as long as it keeps with the 5, 7, 5 you should be able to continue with it. If I recall correctly from school... as I have not been in school for eight years now.

[Aehr]

Loved the picture you've painted for us here :) Great job.

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks Rhea for the compliments.

Devanshu

[Aehr]

You're very welcome :)

[john alan willox]

God i love these and wish i could write them - amazing - nicely done - simple yet elegant - lovely.

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thank you for the kind words and the review....I appreciate your compliment.....

Take care

Devanshu

[catofjade]

Hello, I would change the words "some" and "are" but it's beautiful, do you have any more haiku? You inspire me to do some!

[Devanshu Rajput]

I'm writing some more, I'll post them soon......

Thanks for the review....

Devanshu

[catofjade]

Devanshu has a
Certain clean grace of response
That sets him apart

With simple words he
Awakens our sympathy
Bringing us closer

To ourselves and to
Each other in our journeys
On these paths of light

[Devanshu Rajput]

Wow! instant poetry! it made me feel special......
Such kind words enhance confidence and bring feeling of secured guidance......
Really writerscafe has become my friends hub who care, guide and support......
:)
Nothing can be more precious than the true words of care....to encourage...

With love, care and smile :)

Deavnshu

[Sami Khalil]

Nice , well done...:)

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thanks

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)