Oh! It Started Raining

a brief about rain

             

Dense clouds cover the shining sun.

The morning is turning into night.

Winds blow fast; pretty umbrellas are seen 

outside.

Animals run to the shelter.

The hot day is vanishing they say.

The thundering sound, lightening in sky scares; I hid under my desk.

All doors are shut and windows are closed, 

mine too.

OH! It started raining!

The fine smell of dust. What a pleasure!

It’s only cool and cool.

It’s becoming heavy with every boring  

second.

Today my friends didn't come to play.

Has someone forgotten to close tap in the 

sky?

The window is full with droplets.

The sun glows again in the clear sky.

Rainbow smiles with seven colors. What a scenario!

OH! It stopped raining!

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[john alan willox]

nicely crafted - tap in the sky - rainbow smiles - very child-like without being childish. Thanks.

PS - spelled "shining" sun - no biggie :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks for correcting my mistake...thanks again

[InsanityWriter]

Excellent! I could really see the rainstorm. :D Very well done. (:

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks! i appreciate your inspirational reviews.......

[Pax]

your painted your words in colorful hue... the feeling of rain, i felt that... and i see the clever question... and I'll say maybe they forget to closed it...
colorful and warm expressive thought!

[Devanshu Rajput]

i always like to get reviews by you.....they are very inspirational.....thanks again...

[Pax]

thanks my friend... and your most welcome...

[SHEEMA HUQ]

you have great descrciptive skills I think

[Devanshu Rajput]

really?.....thanks

[Robert James Parfett]

Lovely vivid description and as an Englishman I can say that I have been there many times! Great stuff.

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks

[Relic]

I felt like I was there. Good one.

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lovely words painted in a lanscape of beautiful piece. Stunning words play here and vivid and captivating story progression as it best! love the type change it helps the reads.

[Devanshu Rajput]

Dear Reviewer,

i am glad that you liked my poem. Thanks for the inspirational review.

[Writer #00]

I just read two cute things in a row. The first was a chapter in Tsukin Archangel's book Ozymandias and the second was this. It just put adorable images of the effects rain has on nature and on individuals (not the ones that bring hurricane winds, raze entire cities, creak apart families, and put children six-feet under) the innocent rains that you depicted here. The ones that are like small dogs. They bark a lot and show their tiny fangs just to prove that they are dogs, too.

:3/100

[Writer #00]

That's a face, by the way...not a colon 3. It's definitely more than 3/100...I just don't usually give numerically sensible ratings...that's just me.

[Devanshu Rajput]

Thank you so much for your attention. I appreciate it most. :)

[Michael G. Smith]

Your style of writing brings this poem to life.

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks