A Wish

hope you would enjoy my best piece written so far.......

My useless body, looks outside the window.

Sees the pleasant nature, 

comes a wish to run across the velvet grass.

The lovely rain makes me jealous,

 of children splashing in the puddles.

Once I want to wander,

 explore the fragrant flowers and the nectar fetching

 butterflies, in my garden.

The silent four corners of my room,

 reflect my helplessness and ask, 

 can my cursed body ever go out of the window?

The one who hears my unheard pain is the bed on which

 my body lies,

 since the time immemorial.

 

 

Author's Note

Thanks for reading.

Image credits goes to Google and http://www.flickr.com/photos/46987892@N05/6830788957

Reviews

[James Hanna-Magill]

Dear Devanshu

It is with absolute joy I welcome you to this website.

I am simply another aspiring writer on here and I like reviewing the words of others.

Firstly, you are very young. The internet can be a dangerous place. Take your brother's advice and help, to use it well as you are doing here.

I looked at your profile and could easily roll back the years and see a commonality in interest in the writers you like. In fact I still admire them to this day.

I praise your passion for writing.

I can see already much talent from this beautifully composed piece which celebrates the beauty of the world and nature, whilst boxed in a bedroom , when you want to be out there and enjoy it.

Some of my writing is accessible to all and some is restricted to those who are over 18.

Such are the demands of maturity.

Please may I ask you one thing?

Please keep up your passion for writing and stay on this site, which I consider a secure environment so that we can all enjoy your well constructed words and see the world as you see it for the betterment of us all.

I have a notion at 14 that you can teach me more about life and perception than I could ever teach you at 53.

Be encouraged.

I loved this piece and its perfect simplicity.

Please do not worry about reading my writing. Some of it will be restricted.

I do not require your review, just that you keep a free spirit, an open mind and teach us all .

With my warm regards


James

[Devanshu Rajput]

thank for your response ! I would certainly consider your advice.I love people of guidance and boosting confidence, because I know this is how I will learn.

Take Care!

[stars are far]

That was very expressing ..well done :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks

[stars are far]

welcome :)

[stars are far]

welcome :)

[Stacey Watts]

This was very well expressed here. The words paint a picture of longing to be able to leave the silence of your torment and explore nature's beauty. Great piece.

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks

[gombeggar]

very well done expressing being trapped and on the cusp of the outside world

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad poem. Hard to be locked in and wish to be able to wander outside. Good description create a sad vision. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks

[quinfinn]

whatever malady restricts the narrator to his four walls and imprisons him there doesn't have the power to disable his mind and his love for nature and imagination. the triumph of the human spirit is obvious in this refreshing and vibrant piece.

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks

[Frieda P]

Sounds like some type of chronic pain that keeps from romping with the butterflies but the spirit is not broken, it still delights in the sights & sounds of nature through a window of reflection.

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks

[Dayran]

A wander in the poetry of actions. Nicely done.

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks a lot!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

[gabrielle]

a very tragic tale of a person bound to stay on bed due to illness. i could feel the person's longing and desperation to get up but could not do so. the first line, however, is immediate giveaway on the person's condition hence there's nothing for the readers to wonder about. other than this is, this piece is nicely penned.

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks

[Cara]

amazing write. loved it ^-^

[Devanshu Rajput]

thanks